what i see.

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what i see.

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I wrote this one when I worked overnight in a gas station. Its all things that I have personally seen.

At 6 am the city starts to come alive. A city bus rolls down the street. Men off to work construction and students getting ready for school.
But me I work in a gas station. I see what people don't because they are asleep or out of sheer ignorance.

I see a pregnant mom buy cigarettes and liquer.

I see a lady so stung out on meth she can barely stand.

I see 14 year old girls cut up heroine on the back of a toilet.

I see a lady overdosed on the bathroom floor with her 6 month old baby crying at her side.

What I see people don't want to. I can't say that I want to either.


I see religious views contradict people common sense and better judgement.

I see lives lost and ruind thru depresion.

What I see, what I know I wish I didn't.


I see zoobs pass and ridacule a homeless man even though they are preached love, tolerance and acceptance.

I see parents disown their child because they are pregnant or didn't become the poster child they had hoped and preyed for.

I see ignorance so judgemental twords differance and change.

What I see would bring the strongest of men to his knees.


What I see is a family. A mother, father and child work multiple jobs just to pay the bills.

I see people so full of joy they would do anything for anyone.

I see strangers coming together for one goal to better others.

I see childeren filled with ambition and innocence they have the whole world in their hands.

I see a young family so full of hope and determanation that not even the rainiest of days will shake their love.


What I see I want.
But when I look and see,
I see just me.
All my joy, all my sorrow,
Because noone can truly see the real me.

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I see religious views contradict people common sense and better judgement.
this was aiight
I see ignorance so judgemental twords differance and change
this was ok
What I see I want.
But when I look and see,
I see just me.
All my joy, all my sorrow,
Because noone can truly see the real me.
With ut this i woulda sayed it bombed ... nice twist whooooodii... but still i got lost in that i sea of sees
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I agree. it was my first attempt. Any advice on how I can make it better?

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