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With a Brush with no paint Words Evoke faith
A revoked Pass N Ta heaven theres Closed Gates
Sneak in The Back Way Sins Repent thru Confessing

Foot Prints Of Two Left Feet the..The Devil Does Carry
The load of the world..Is that not Why he's Burried?
Angelic Amendments Even In Heaven Theres Hatin..

Was his name Not Lucifer That Of A Beautiful Angel?
Power Done Maimed Him Scarred Limbs Callin Em Satan
Jealous Of Great Things Degrading The Great Wings

Got what Hes Cravin, An Empire In Hell But Its Flaming
Rings Bells In ya Vision?..Cuz Thru Sinnin We Heading
To Suffer a Wedding Marry a Soul Ta Eternal Enslavement

Da Worth Of Ya Faith Is Concrete as The Pavement
Or The Lack Of Its Wieght You Can Use As Ya Payment
Determine Ya Hell Thru The Sins That You Came Wit

Im Living In Mines Thank GOD Im A PAGAN...
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Dude this is dope man. Usually I don't like religious stuff but this gets it done son

Foot Prints Of Two Left Feet the..The Devil Does Carry The load of the world..Is that not Why he's Burried?

That line really made me think. Write more write now

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Foot Prints Of Two Left Feet the..The Devil Does Carry
The load of the world..Is that not Why he's Burried?
Angelic Amendments Even In Heaven Theres Hatin..

Was his name Not Lucifer That Of A Beautiful Angel?
Power Done Maimed Him Scarred Limbs Callin Em Satan
Jealous Of Great Things Degrading The Great Wings
That Was DOPE.. Flip You've Come Along Way. I See Your Elevation Keep It ^ (No Caps Don't Wanna Be Hatin' LMAO)
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Was his name Not Lucifer That Of A Beautiful Angel?
Power Done Maimed Him Scarred Limbs Callin Em Satan
Jealous Of Great Things Degrading The Great Wings

Got what Hes Cravin, An Empire In Hell But Its Flaming
Rings Bells In ya Vision?..Cuz Thru Sinnin We Heading
To Suffer a Wedding Marry a Soul Ta Eternal Enslavement

Da Worth Of Ya Faith Is Concrete as The Pavement
Or The Lack Of Its Wieght You Can Use As Ya Payment
Determine Ya Hell Thru The Sins That You Came Wit

Im Living In Mines Thank GOD Im A PAGAN...
You're filthy

-- Fri Jun 18, 2010 2:06 pm --
Was his name Not Lucifer That Of A Beautiful Angel?
Power Done Maimed Him Scarred Limbs Callin Em Satan
Jealous Of Great Things Degrading The Great Wings

Got what Hes Cravin, An Empire In Hell But Its Flaming
Rings Bells In ya Vision?..Cuz Thru Sinnin We Heading
To Suffer a Wedding Marry a Soul Ta Eternal Enslavement

Da Worth Of Ya Faith Is Concrete as The Pavement
Or The Lack Of Its Wieght You Can Use As Ya Payment
Determine Ya Hell Thru The Sins That You Came Wit

Im Living In Mines Thank GOD Im A PAGAN...
You're filthy
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Thanks for the peep Rip..Creative N Catch
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FlipSide wrote:Thanks for the peep Rip..Creative N Catch
just the way you said that made me believe this was a epic piece
you sir are the man no matter what you write

lulz but seriously...this was a dope piece
religion is always a good subject to touch on
but some people are too bias, either way keep it up man
you did your thing, nice to see you expand your lyricism
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flip this is good , i liked your choice of words and structure
nice bars i agree with creative on the part he says was "DOPE" .
it's good
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Very good imagery the foot prints with 2 left feetfor sure best line. With heaven and hell raps or poems its a hit or a miss. I'd say that was a bunt.
Im Living In Mines Thank GOD Im A PAGAN... that's a funny ass oxymoron.

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Controversial issue (when delivered properly) = automatic win. It started off kind of slow and I thought I was going to hate it but you killed 2/3 of it and the closer made me giggle. I was surprised at how much you've elevated. Good job. BUT you need to work on your structure and grammar.

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^ <3 she leaves the BEST feed. My poems miss you FL

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