Ok so yeah First bit of wrighting ive done since I got out of jail....leave some feedback please
Im bout to enlighten these rap cats
scribe a rhyme so complex Einstine cant even fathom the consept
tha Bout im wrighting turns yours to crap acts
this tribe of mine grows like a vortex we intwine,I get at em your heart lept
cap rats fast,n get out like lightnin'
you slipped up had ya son "inline",a cons text(context) thats bauer on this hand
strap facts, last to spit yet win this with out even tryin'
gripped the cup ad one to my minds complex now scatter this my land.
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turn back the hands-of-time one of the plans-of-mine and the need to scam-a-dime/
learn that ill leave sand-in-ya-spine
from the hour-glass your losing
power-fast the tower-crash as I scan-the-sign/
but like scarface Im still standing-fine/
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Decent drop, u have a unique concept, its a bit confusing here and there, the multis kinda through off the flow, but its ok, u have some cool vocab, and interesting approach to show subliminality... keep it up man.
I don't know u but it looks to me that uve been on illest when it first started, but yeah if u battle let me know...cuz I wanna battle a vet.
I don't know u but it looks to me that uve been on illest when it first started, but yeah if u battle let me know...cuz I wanna battle a vet.
thanks for the feedback
I haven't battled in fucking ages...or if I even have time anymore
Ill see what I can do.
I haven't battled in fucking ages...or if I even have time anymore
Ill see what I can do.
turn back the hands-of-time one of the plans-of-mine and the need to scam-a-dime/
learn that ill leave sand-in-ya-spine
from the hour-glass your losing
power-fast the tower-crash as I scan-the-sign/
but like scarface Im still standing-fine/
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welcome back
shit nice drop a little confusing but well
nice flow n concept
9/10
keep'em comin
shit nice drop a little confusing but well
nice flow n concept
9/10
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
thanks again..yeah some things most people won't get...if anyone needs clearing up of what I actualy ment just holla
turn back the hands-of-time one of the plans-of-mine and the need to scam-a-dime/
learn that ill leave sand-in-ya-spine
from the hour-glass your losing
power-fast the tower-crash as I scan-the-sign/
but like scarface Im still standing-fine/
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ky ill was arrested on to catch a predator for trying to fuck an 11 year old boy he met online
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
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wat tis up wit u ya postin a load of crazy shit every where
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect
!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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hop off the gods dickMutual Hostility wrote:wat tis up wit u ya postin a load of crazy shit every where
your breath probably be smelling like ballsweat and funyuns
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]
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