Diss-missin' you Pt.1

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Diss-missin' you Pt.1

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Be like "Damn Wth do it take to get some feed"
Ha ha ha "It's like wildbill he' just a steroid fein"
He's like "Omg dude how'd you know my biz"
I'm like "Shut up keep suckin arvincibles dick"
I tell the truth homie All these others rappers are bullshit .
That's Like 'viral' gettin' hit wit pro-active, Haha it really aint gonna do-shit.
Nah homie i'm just being stupid, I know i'm the best, i ain't got to prove-it.
'Ekoms' showing emotions will be the day that 'complex' ends up stupid.
Shit if you knew this.
I'm the realest Motha fuckin Emcee on here that could even be.
That's like 'Kurse' gettin' Signed but he's "Cursed" by melody.
It hurts so tell-em-g, wasn't no one feelin' "Touch"
So why are you on here even tellin' us?
That's like 'Arv & Bill' the two faggots that are now teamin' up.
They're still not even half a man, Now there like "He's Ruff"
That's like me throwin' my 'Cee's' up, Hold up '4' a minute I thought I was 'jesus'.
Do you believe Thus, My ryhmes pack more heat than osama did the towers, Belief's a must.
Ya bars wouldn't ever be worth nothing even if you were to dip them in gold.
Me & The devil got a agreement to take wack rappers now you owe him ya soul.
Lyricaly i'm a genious, Spiritually have u screamin, My words burn like holy water to demons.
Ya life aint nothin' but a time-waste, So come at me with ya mind-straight.
You not thugg'd cause you live in a city wit a high crime-rate.
You're not a 'hazard' cause you can't even spell one line-right.
'That Guy You Hate' it's really your time-iight.
You should comit suicide dont try to fight.
You can't rap, yet alone write.
i'm telling facts, just give up on life.
All off these "Fruity loops" they can't "Beat" even if they "lubricated" each others mouse.
They couldn't make something "Hard" even if they were putting it in another dudes mouth.
Yall some real weak ass producers on here i'm just tellin' you.
These nigga's Should "Loop" a "Fiasco" If they want "The cool".

Just writing. Leave some feed tell me what you think. not hating just was trying to be funny. lol
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Post by WILDBILLISAGUIDOFAGGIT »

It was decent...Some good concepts, just didn't have the corect wording...Flow was okay, little choppy at parts though...Overall cool keep it up, some funny personals...Collab for pt 2?

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Sure...Do it in PM? Or a messenger?
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u carry msn? or jus aim

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I got a msn account just don't have the messenger installed..i'ma install the messenger...add me tha-phantom@hotmail.com
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lookin' for some more feed....anybody?
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Post by Omega Bill »

Everyone you mentioned has clowned you way too many times. You won't battle ANY of em. Really, just stop doing disses. Not hating, but seriously.
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don't free post......leave feed not freeposting
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Wowwww, ur so wack hahaha.
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Post by Omega Bill »

In all honesty, it was a step back. You did a collab with Khan and you were showing elevation, used multis, alright punches, good structure.

Then you do this. Forced rhymes, hardly any multis, structure was horrible. Whats the deal? You were really showing that you could go places, and then you do something like this. I don't know. Maybe you just felt the need to try a site diss, I dunno, but it wasn't good. Lines were also played, you've used almost the same lines in previous disses.

There's your feed, and I'm being serious about trying something else. Everytime you do a diss it doesn't turn out good but a regular verse shows elevation.
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Post by Arvincible »

answer this question,
how do u not see people say "stop talking shit if u cant back it up"?

they keep saying if ur gonna diss people, u have to battle them.
idk why u keep ignoring it. Stop avoiding the truth, and stop lyin to urself.

if u ignore this question or have a stupid answer i will run u off this site..
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Post by Arvincible »

ThatGuyYouHate wrote:
But with This Piece i Think Ya Fell Back in Tha Hole And Went Back Further Then Where Ya Started.. You Can Say This is Hate And i'll Accept That Cuz i'd Be More Generous Towards someone i'm Cool With But Ayy Sometimes Tha Truth Hurts i Guess.. Lol

lmfao word..
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Post by Glamtrash »

This was shit. I figure even I could do better than this, and I don't for one second claim to be a rapper.

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Post by MesaR »

agreed this was not the best drop from you liked this bit though

I tell the truth homie All these others rappers are bullshit .
That's Like 'viral' gettin' hit wit pro-active, Haha it really aint gonna do-shit.
Nah homie i'm just being stupid, I know i'm the best, i ain't got to prove-it.
'Ekoms' showing emotions will be the day that 'complex' ends up stupid.
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..

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