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musical fight

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i haven't written in a while, and ive never done anything like this i don't think. obviously its not about a song, or music. its kinda short, but whatever it means something to me, and the rhymes are pretty simple. feed it.


our tune commenced disconnected
till you beat found its way to mine
never though id be effected
i was never the type to pine
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me

i ran away and mingled
with the other sounds that jingled
till you showed me what true music resembled

i listened to my tune and it began to clatter
the sound of my music just didnt seem together
i reached for your song and found the perfect match
our sounds together are proved the perfect catch

and the choir will chant :
'Every great song ends sometime right?'
wrong, i found his love, in a musical fight.
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LadySam wrote:
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
nice ta c ya back at it sonnnn!

my favorite little piece i quoted, flow wasnt bad at all there

your vocab in writing is better

next one should be longer.. 1
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

this was different,good tho,rhino showed the part already i wanted 2,but nonetheless its good sammm..soo this is what u do,get urself some free time,make a part2 or justa different idea all 2gether and drop more! i also liked this part below

i listened to my tune and it began to clatter
the sound of my music just didnt seem together
i reached for your song and found the perfect match
our sounds together are proved the perfect catch

cool stuff^,stay@it,peace
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thanks guysssss
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Post by NiGhTmArE »

Yo..

I felt the piece...It seems u good at puttin that emotion in ya rhymes!! Keep that up...Lookin forward to readin more pieces..

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thanks dude.
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Post by Haz »

our tune commenced disconnected
till you beat found its way to mine
never though id be effected
i was never the type to pine
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
^ part that flowed the Most
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Post by Kurse »

Very sexy piece.

Good to see you writing again.

Almost forgot why you were here for a sec. haha
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Post by Glamtrash »

I like this. I don't have much to compare it to, but it's well written and you show emotion very well in your shit.

Keep it up.
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Post by Cee4 »

yeah this was pretty good. it flowed well and lyrics were good. its orignal too. i dont see anyone else droppin anything like. i didnt think it was as good as your verse in the collab with Plex but it was still quite impressive.
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the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

nice, it was pretty deep throughout the whole piece, seemed more poetic with a bit of style in it, i'd say probably ur best piece,

it obviously meant something to u, when i read it i could sense the feelings n emotion put into it, good stuff
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Post by LadySam »

thank youuuuu
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