musical fight
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- LadySam
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musical fight
i haven't written in a while, and ive never done anything like this i don't think. obviously its not about a song, or music. its kinda short, but whatever it means something to me, and the rhymes are pretty simple. feed it.
our tune commenced disconnected
till you beat found its way to mine
never though id be effected
i was never the type to pine
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
i ran away and mingled
with the other sounds that jingled
till you showed me what true music resembled
i listened to my tune and it began to clatter
the sound of my music just didnt seem together
i reached for your song and found the perfect match
our sounds together are proved the perfect catch
and the choir will chant :
'Every great song ends sometime right?'
wrong, i found his love, in a musical fight.
our tune commenced disconnected
till you beat found its way to mine
never though id be effected
i was never the type to pine
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
i ran away and mingled
with the other sounds that jingled
till you showed me what true music resembled
i listened to my tune and it began to clatter
the sound of my music just didnt seem together
i reached for your song and found the perfect match
our sounds together are proved the perfect catch
and the choir will chant :
'Every great song ends sometime right?'
wrong, i found his love, in a musical fight.
Re: musical fight
nice ta c ya back at it sonnnn!LadySam wrote:
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
my favorite little piece i quoted, flow wasnt bad at all there
your vocab in writing is better
next one should be longer.. 1
- -TraMaTiK-
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this was different,good tho,rhino showed the part already i wanted 2,but nonetheless its good sammm..soo this is what u do,get urself some free time,make a part2 or justa different idea all 2gether and drop more! i also liked this part below
i listened to my tune and it began to clatter
the sound of my music just didnt seem together
i reached for your song and found the perfect match
our sounds together are proved the perfect catch
cool stuff^,stay@it,peace
i listened to my tune and it began to clatter
the sound of my music just didnt seem together
i reached for your song and found the perfect match
our sounds together are proved the perfect catch
cool stuff^,stay@it,peace
yeah this was pretty good. it flowed well and lyrics were good. its orignal too. i dont see anyone else droppin anything like. i didnt think it was as good as your verse in the collab with Plex but it was still quite impressive.
my favourite part
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
my favourite part
the melody continued weakly
your harmony tried to greet me
my music declined yours repeatedly
until you hesitantly decided to leave me
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