typeo, complex, diss

lunathecursedangel · Post by **lunathecursedangel** » Tue Nov 15, 2005 4:13 pm

Typeo

I love how everybody on the internet is a thug/
thinking somehow without face to face its a benifet to blast slugs/
but its not like you got the atmosphere surroudin' your brain/
ya'll should of begun to atleast leer, and not come at us in vain/
cause we 'bring the pain' like the methods of any emcee/
ya'll just 'flee in the rain' cause you melt n' become flimsee/
wicked witch of the east, west, na, we the the wicked beasts/
Bird had a battle and never showed, hope he was sickened atleast/
cause if not hes just a pussy that can't handle the pressure/
But he does love things to press-up against his prostate in good measure/
but thats just wrong, like silkk thinking he was in a gang/
like one of Ja Rules love songs, makes blacks turn KKK and wanna hang/
turn to the whites with the truth to the maleficient words that we bring/
cause tick tock tick tock, hear the coo coo clock ring/
or the oven ding, cause this roast is thuroughly toasted to supreme/
so they ban, can't represent just a fake man stuck in a pathetic dream/
sticky with that cream, boys 27 and still stuck with nothing/
all he got is some fronting n' cells dieing from all his shit huffing/
Head so far up their asses their beards are mistaken for females muffs/
thinking they got enough, but all that we see is boys dressed as powder puffs/red, blue, and green, thinking they are clean lookin' and mean/
but it just seems that they are wrapped in orange a cuisin so lean/

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x fkn legend ?[Bird]: i wish a nigga would try me in the street lol
x fkn legend ?[Bird]: sayin imma kid when im 18
x fkn legend ?[Bird]: spray the kay his way

x fkn legend ?[Bird]: Are you white?

ur blowing cock, then ya asking me if i'm white//
Racist?, I stereo-type my own race when i write//

come on bitch, battle? i'll do it pen-or-mic//
kill 2 birds with one stone,to end-your-flight// (2 faced)

verbal attentions narrowed, ur in-for-a-fight//
not worth my time, but i want to ensure-the-site//

its not even a joke, u flow-damn-wack//
when I step ya whole-clan-back//

remind me of molasses cuz ur slow-and-black//
n ya only jump on the street when I'm throwing-crack//

never winned (wind), screaming help, by writing-on-sales// (sails)
even the hardware store, makes profit from ya biting-on-nails//

seeing you on top of flow, is rare like sighting-whales//
quit rapping now they dont, allow a mic-in-jails//

Anonymous · Post by **Anonymous** » Tue Nov 15, 2005 4:16 pm

I still love that first line you had Tom, that shits just fuckin' classic.

Adept · Post by **Adept** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 12:56 am

i'll review this later just a question though, why do you diss people that will never see your diss? lol

Ambiguous Realm · Post by **Ambiguous Realm** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 1:26 am

lol dats wat i was wondering too....but oh well...its pretty straight....

ur blowing cock, then ya asking me if i'm white//
Racist?, I stereo-type my own race when i write//

dats da best bar in da whole thing..haha..keep droppin...peace

lunathecursedangel · Post by **lunathecursedangel** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 7:31 am

it was just some quick shit, so yah, and they will see it, when i post the link,

bird might even respond, lol

Adept · Post by **Adept** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 7:42 am

this wasn't bad your rhyme scheme was simplistic at the top got better towards the bottom

once you get more comfortable with wording shit and multis you'll be able to drop some impressive shit

gotta work on the uneven bars a lil bit too, if your shits organized it looks like you actually spent time on it and put thought into it instead of random bars thrown together just tryna rhyme shit, it doesn't really matter much in text but if you ever rap to a beat its going to sound awkward

and you gotta stop getting offended at getting banned from chatrooms lol, thats almost as childish as being the one doing the banning, net thugs are pathetic but making net disses at them on a message board doesn't make you look too much better

Anonymous · Post by **Anonymous** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 9:41 am

I ain't offended from getting banned lol, I just find it funny that he could never defend himself from what I asked him so he would just get someone to ban me. I don't go on palace to sit and be with people who are fake friends, I go on because I can cyph with tom or to try and battle someone. Bout it really, so being banned...lol I don't give a fuck.

Adept · Post by **Adept** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 10:04 am

oh this was you & tom that confused the hell out of me

i thought it was just tom going off again

the wording shit was mainly directed at tom, typeos verse was worded pretty well bars were structured better too, your rhyme scheme is probably what leads people to not drop alot of feedback though, cause i noticed when i don't dash off my multis i only get half the feedback cause peeps don't bother to read it lol

tom, your verse was aight your wordplay attempts weren't really effective though too stretched, you tryed to make simplistic lines seem more complex then they really were

typeo, pretty good verse mainly direct hitting on the topic no real flaws except a few spelling errors and a simple aa/bb rhyme scheme for a the most part you flipped it a few times to an ab/ab but i'm use to seeing multis so one-two syllabol rhymes don't impress me much

lunathecursedangel · Post by **lunathecursedangel** » Wed Nov 16, 2005 2:06 pm

it is what it is

typeo, complex, diss

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