The Invisible Man

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NeverOddOrEven
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The Invisible Man

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The Invisible Man


This is the land of simple tones where each candid picture broke
Where every man's invisible if he stands on principles
Give me 5 cents for each time I answer with my flows
I'd have a little gold and a stack of nickel rolls
Damn it's pitiful and sad to think of those
With passion in their souls, but no chance for it to grow
It's like each thoughtful kid's stuck in an apocalypse
Full of zombies, pricks, and Abercrombie chicks
No one cares what the message in the bottle is
Unless it's alcoholic and they get to drink all of it
Everyone's a fiend for the next electronic fix
Can we save the world? Maybe we should call it quits
Maybe it's true that computers replaced humans
Wonder if I'll be alive when humans don't make music
No hugs left, just drunk sex and dubstep
Dried tears, apathy, and material success
Broken homes, obesity, depression, no love left
Until it's gone... and we're just dust in the sunset[/center]
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Pretty awesome man it got better as it went on as well. Flow was great throughout and I don't really have anything bad to say about this drop. It wasn't long but imo the length suited it and it's not like you wanna ruin it by dragging it out. Good shit man I'm enjoying your verses keep posting.

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Shorter, more economical than your previous drop
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