a few bars

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cyanidesyn
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a few bars

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my dreams so close that its nearly reality/
or i could b wrong become 1 of tha casulties/
all of these comparisons y u tryin 2 flatter me/
in tha beginning i wasnt shit y tha apologies/
tha best wat i gotta b easy analogy/
beato spit flames tracks burnt like a calorie/
i can keep goin enigizer no battery/
point blank period there is no after me/
say that im trippin this cnt b true/
ive heard wat they spittin n this cnt b u/
kno shit ive been around a block or 2/
n wat they speakin is impossible/
real recognize real its illogical/
wait u got me april fools/
jungle all day we sum apes wit tools/
best thing 2 decide jus play it cool/
i'll put u in tha earth 4 tha worms as food/
2 do wat i do ur incapable/
addicted 2 beef but i hate tha bull/
tha whole mind state is i will not lose/
i do not fear i do not care/
smarter then ur average yogi bear/
take seat its my time do u need a chair/
all u need 2 kno is life aint fair/
lets c if u bout this call it truth or dare/
truth is u bitch n ya homeboys scared
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Re: a few bars

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it was alright i got the hang of the flow few bars in but could still be tightend up some more. kinda looks like a freestyle/keystyle or w/e.
its str8 though. the opener was pretty good and kept a steady flow
thru out. try some more rhyme schemes though
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