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Craziest Ride

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Still on the craziest ride
Crazy inside cause it made me alive
a darkened heart sparking art
foreshadowed by his shadiest drive
should I give up or maybe I try
good feelings really hate me disguised
Questioning how long it would take me to die
Not a sound..not even a Lazy reply
Damn, we grew up as kids together
this music will make sure I Live Forever
I use morals don't make me the lie
I need a therapist I'm aware of this
But writing while smoking this Cig Is Better
I'm not saying you should take need to try
my minds fresh to death the reaper peaks his eyes
As i'm breezing by, he accept and steps
cause I'm the live for a Reason guy

Eye open focused
like I'm ready when I hunt
mirror smokeless but you'll notice
I'm steady with the blunts
when I was on the edge I knew
they wouldn't catch me from the jump
they would love to see him fall but I stayed afloat
Like an awakened ghost..
Levitating above a stage of hope
Realizing ain't no way to cope
I looked at all the dubstep par-tiers
like "Damn..I got more Rage then Most"
Raised empty Like I drank my cup then Made a Toast
In societies cage I'd coast
Born the year Nas started I'm cut from the Age of Dope
The Substance Era.. Substituted My physical with my soul
like Fuck a Mirra...Def to the biased talk
I'm lying.. It's all love I "hear ya"

Haven't gained in long, mind staying strong
waiting till the pain is gone..Red or blue pill?
FUCK IT, they're both white and just Painted On
thoughts in the core of the earth I think deep..
Mask tatted on my face I let my Ink speak...
God forgive my sins..I don't live to win
my spirit lives with in
the elements of Lyrics Loyalty and Discipline
You'll grow even if that odd that Exists is slim
We all breathe the same air that travels With the wind
We all bleed the same.. no need to rob ya Wrist of Skin
even if the thought of losing ya self is Afta you
Show ya soul's GPS.. Gratitude, Re-craft ya View
Cause beating ya self up will
only leave your body n brain Black N Blue
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Re: Craziest Ride

Post by complexity »

Holy ish man.

This was fire. Wish I had more time to break it down. But the best line on this shit, and maybe I've ever seen you write is this one.

"Haven't gained in long, mind staying strong
waiting till the pain is gone..Red or blue pill?
FUCK IT, they're both white and just Painted On"
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Born the year Nas started I'm cut from the Age of Dope The Substance Era.. Substituted My physical with my soul

Dope man Dopeeee.... That line right there is what everyone would know this song for I can hear a whole fuckin audience repeating this bar

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a level of writing I truly appreciate and accept-wish I could hear this peace....truly in synch with the dialect of true hip hop.........I was awwed by this-very nice
I CHANNEL all my ENERGY,
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//

I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
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Yo man, I'm with Plex on what the most fire fucking bars were. I'd like to quote this whole piece, but the third verse really spoke for the piece as a whole. Your schemes were unique, multies were on fire and the content was impeccable. This was definitely worth the read, and instills in me a new level of respect for your skills, man. Word. Not just for feed but for ups, everyone needs to check this out. Stay up, man. Respect.
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DAMN. best shit i've read on here in a long time.
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This was cool, i liked the short little flow and concepts and metaphores where sick, I haven't read much from you of late but this is fire.
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