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Written to Kendrick Lamar's ADHD...


Life is a secret game...
thoughts drip like a faucet but they don't leak the same/
If I'm reachin space, I'll take the money but you can keep the fame/
I'll be the weaker flame... the star never seen with the naked eye/
Heart of ebony, my place to hide is in the vacant sky/
Findin new ways to thrive...
but my lack of patience makes me wanna put braces on my racing mind so my thoughts will stay in line/
Or maybe I'm wastin time by gazin at this tainted shrine/
Feelin fake inside like I'm chasin pride with water and I'm tastin wine/
So in ways my faith is blind, doubted the truth and ignored the facts/
Filled my cup at the fountain of youth and decided to pour it back/
Is it a morbid act? cuz I don't plan on breathin forever or bein remembered/
Cuz this world full of theives and pretenders will turn on you quicker than leaves in September/
A legion of demons that enter when yer steamin and start freezin the embers/
Instead of seekin adventure they'd rather see yer dreams in a blender/
No reason is rendered... its just a part of the fallacy/
They'll smash yer heart with a mallet before allowin a star in the galaxy/
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It's alright by your standards I've seen much better but it was still a decent written. Only complaints are some lines were pretty bland and lacked real substance whereas some stood out immediately. The flow and use of rhymes kept it entertaining to read. It wasn't a bad drop at all it just wasn't one of your highlights.

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Post by leeroi green »

this is cool but seriously i thought you had a longer more prolific drop the way i kept seeing the link

none the less this is better than most people put together
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