Green Blood

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PyDizZLE21
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Green Blood

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Heres your verse Mr.Green

Fag you knw I'm Hot with Words, When I drop get Served...//
If Scotts a Herb then quit ur bitchin and Drop a Verse!...//
Or end up Boxed in Church, Fag, phony, Lame fukk...//
Bitch Only battles homies whens his changes upp...//
U stay ducked, Ur puns are weak u don't want the Beef...//
Cuz my "base-Ball", so I'm on top of the green monster like Upper Seats...//
This fukk is Sweet u ain't touchin p,cuz for instance hes Gay...//
Hes neck gets chopped put ya head in a box like NFL refs lookin at Instant Replay...//
Fukk mean!, fags soul is Frail...//
So I'll crush Green and Smoke an L...//
Matter Fact Fukk Green!,this a Black Rap in my Black Fad, I got sum Black Mags...//
Ina black hat an a Black mask, shootin Black bullets to put u in a Black Bag!...//
Ur wack fag, all in all ur a bitch and Ur sawed off isn't Shit...//
How about a sawed off to the hip or using every murder tech from saw one thru six!...//
Every word I'm spittin hurts cuz I serve Precision...//
Hes like ur rhymes are gay and ur lines are played, which is every Verse U've written!...//


yea yea die slow...reply too... I wanna see wht u got kid....misses green...hahahaha
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Ur wack fag, all in all ur a bitch and Ur sawed off isn't Shit...//
How about a sawed off to the hip or using every murder tech from saw one thru six!...//
<< lol that shit was cool nice imagery.

solid multis thru out but also some filler multis and repeating words (i mean aside from black) in your multis

This fukk is Sweet u ain't touchin p,cuz for instance hes Gay...//
Hes neck gets chopped put ya head in a box like NFL refs lookin at Instant Replay...//
this was also well developed line i think had imagery, pun, punch etc this is wat you should be focusing on when battling are these kinda punchs or persnoals

good verse thru out that BLACK MASK etc part wasnt bad i can hear that
over a beat tho rather than being for text.
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Well this verse and the verse for pest I wrote it as if it was sum audio and I kinda wanted whoever read this to kinda get that feeling so yea, but I feel u thanks for the feed anti...
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Not bad im mobile so I will post it later 2nd bar was the best readingf it as audio that is

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Haha u would like that filler line but aight I'll wait for ur verse soonn

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