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My views are deep Like iv'e found a mammoth
the fossil found undamaged..
People up with anxiety down with Panic..
listening for a sign,
what was that sound heard Around the planet??
I'm standing my ground..Laying my blueprint
don't want my generation to say everyday was a nuisance
due to the cage made of rules
and ways to think strictly paved for fools
Slacked off during Public Education,& I just paid for school
trying to live for to give more
thinking what it would be like If I did score
And got my Point across at this Point i'm Lost
staying high like a therapy appointment cost
Balling my fists till my joints have crossed
my mind does the screaming excuse me if my voice is off
I'm tired of chasing things I don't need
Like I show greed to proceed and blow weed
Depressions a Bitch that won't Leave
trying to get deeper with No Leads
Not a clue of what I got ta do
I'm all over the place, still stand my ground
Looking like a autum tree even when Fam's around
Ready to Dive in this blue echo like the plans ta drown
Imagine Ripples of sadness getting a hold of nothing
not a Hand Is Found..Haters need to keep their cool
I won't fan the town..Like species exinction
I bring change so Fan's is Bound
though I don't strive for destruction or its damaged crown
I'm close to losing it like I could Manage pounds
Silence in power is how my Panic sounds
Action in motion is me Backing Comation
Rebeling against the one's that talk good Lacking devotion
Sitting in boats in a river, while we're in Rafts in the Ocean
Floating so bitter...Never knowing where we're at when we're coasting
Displaying tears..cause the feeling of reality is Trapped in Emotion
"Tragedy" The path for our coping, just want it all back am I asking or hoping
trying to live for to give more
thinking what it would be like If I did score
And got my Point across at this Point i'm Lost
staying high like a therapy appointment cost
^^ that part was my favorite
You did a excellent job on this one.
Keep writing
'm standing my ground..Laying my blueprint
don't want my generation to say everyday was a nuisance
due to the cage made of rules
and ways to think strictly paved for fools
Slacked off during Public Education,& I just paid for school
I like how you articulate your thought process
you didn't fall off on the reason to the rhyme.. real solid content.. flow fell off only slightly..
i like the aggressive stance you took on the subject content..
Damn.... I relate to this whole piece dude... this was a good read... I enjoy seeing these kind of drops cause I know theres someone else out there feels like I do... these three verses below were the ones that really stood out for me... its kinda how I feel...
Good shit Haz... if I were to rate this 10 being the best man I'd give this a 10... good read bro
keep droppin
Haz wrote:Slacked off during Public Education,& I just paid for school
trying to live for to give more
thinking what it would be like If I did score
And got my Point across at this Point i'm Lost
staying high like a therapy appointment cost
Balling my fists till my joints have crossed
my mind does the screaming excuse me if my voice is off
I'm all over the place, still stand my ground
Looking like a autum tree even when Fam's around
Ready to Dive in this blue echo like the plans ta drown
Imagine Ripples of sadness getting a hold of nothing
not a Hand Is Found..Haters need to keep their cool
I won't fan the town..Like species exinction
I bring change so Fan's is Bound
though I don't strive for destruction or its damaged crown
I'm close to losing it like I could Manage pounds
Silence in power is how my Panic sounds
Action in motion is me Backing Comation
Rebeling against the one's that talk good Lacking devotion
Sitting in boats in a river, while we're in Rafts in the Ocean
Floating so bitter...Never knowing where we're at when we're coasting
Displaying tears..cause the feeling of reality is Trapped in Emotion
"Tragedy" The path for our coping, just want it all back am I asking or hoping
Don't Let The Game Make U, Make Urself
Lawgix
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"Sometimes You Gotta Stand By Your Failures To Recognize Your Success" Joe Budden
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damn dude...Im calling this classic...fucken everything was on point...the content was fucken amazing...I enjoyed all of it...too hard to pull out bars that stood out,bcuz the whole shit was fucken flawless....dope drop!!!!
My views are deep Like iv'e found a mammoth
the fossil found undamaged..
People up with anxiety down with Panic..
listening for a sign,
what was that sound heard Around the planet??
Interesting way to open this piece. Definitely has me wondering what's going to follow, so you have my attention.
I'm standing my ground..Laying my blueprint
don't want my generation to say everyday was a nuisance
due to the cage made of rules
and ways to think strictly paved for fools
Slacked off during Public Education,& I just paid for school
Flow seems to chop up a little to me, but maybe that's just me. I'm seeing some emotion and serious thoughts beginning to come out of the woodwork.
trying to live for to give more
thinking what it would be like If I did score
And got my Point across at this Point i'm Lost
staying high like a therapy appointment cost
Balling my fists till my joints have crossed
my mind does the screaming excuse me if my voice is off
The therapy appointment line and the last line in this section really stood out to me.
I'm tired of chasing things I don't need
Like I show greed to proceed and blow weed
Depressions a Bitch that won't Leave
trying to get deeper with No Leads
I can feel where you are coming from in this section.
Not a clue of what I got ta do
I'm all over the place, still stand my ground
Looking like a autum tree even when Fam's around
Ready to Dive in this blue echo like the plans ta drown
Imagine Ripples of sadness getting a hold of nothing
not a Hand Is Found..Haters need to keep their cool
I won't fan the town..Like species exinction
I bring change so Fan's is Bound
Alot of imagery and metaphorical type shit blended in this. I dig this segment as a whole alot.
though I don't strive for destruction or its damaged crown
I'm close to losing it like I could Manage pounds
Silence in power is how my Panic sounds
Seems like the flow gets a little chopped here...
Action in motion is me Backing Comation
Rebeling against the one's that talk good Lacking devotion
Sitting in boats in a river, while we're in Rafts in the Ocean
Floating so bitter...Never knowing where we're at when we're coasting
Displaying tears..cause the feeling of reality is Trapped in Emotion
"Tragedy" The path for our coping, just want it all back am I asking or hoping
I dig how you closed this out... Seems to me like you wanted to add a little more at the end to possibly give it more 'closure', but at the same time, it doesnt really need it. One of the best drops I have seen in awhile from you Haz. Only thing I could say is to try to stay away from the three line sets because it seems to throw your flow off a bit. Of course, as an audio it could be completely different. Keep dropping new shit fam.
