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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zdaAyZTty2s[/video]

I let my mind rest, and let my spirit give my pen guidance
imagine if we were left silent, everything social was now left private
the sky never met pilots, all clocks were broken we were left timeless
we evolved from lesser primates, but our parents bred us hybrids
before we had our senses blinded, we thought at measured alignments
we answered to your Highness, and bled to fight for his likeness
brothers who led the revivals, spiritual teachings or crime...
it's time to open your pamphlets, review time and all of it's damage
sunken cities, abandoned, all the worlds science turned to magic
civilizations grew backwards, resorting to rubble over the planet
re-built beyond what you could imagine, we made another passage
through the body our mother shared, not that many others cared
as her body becomes impaired...we see the scars she once had bared
healing, sealing what was there, replacing veins with metal tubes
sucked her blood til' none was left to use, now it's unacceptable
they say she won't accept abuse, but she won't make a spectacle
broke new veins for nutrition, leaving oceans wet with new conditions
in a black abyss the view is missin', time spirals into a new ascension
documents saved and previews permitted, every author knew isn't listed
none sure who existed, but placed blame on those who persisted
crucified then publicized, criticized before it was in the public eyes
drones led like a puppets life, cursed like a voodoo puppet might...
end up, as they twist your limbs up, shake your family tree and bless ya
with the apple Eve trimmed from, the old tree we used to call Wisdom...



these thoughts could be considered a symptom of insomnia
a drug I'm prolly on, or just another thought brought by a Godly source
regardless I'm pretty sure you would just go get your party on...
thats why all hope for this world is already lost....
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this was a nice read and it was fun trying to figure how you might deliver this to this track and i really enjoyed the closer
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thanx bro appreciate it
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the first two bars stood out the most for me.. i Liked this piece , good metas, good flow, picture painted.. it had you written all over it.
anyways good stuff, keep it up
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Very good stuff man. Content wise it is a refreshing change to the typical "insert metaphor to illustrate how bad-ass I am or how dope my rhymes are" that I believe is a massive pitfall of hip-hop lyricism.
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This was very well written, I love your choice of words. I too was wondering how you'd deliver this because some of the multies didn't quite match up to the way I'd spit it, but I didn't write this and I don't know how it sounded to you as you wrote it lol. I thought the opening 4 bars were very strong, as well as the last 4. I wouldn't say it fell off in the middle, I think I just favored your choice of words and rhymes in the beginning and ending bars. This was pretty nice though, man, real talk. I kinda pictured Common while reading it.
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i enjoyed the visuals man, cool beat too
stoned locomotion, im highly trained, flow fluid with pricy strains
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This was nice. Nice imagery, good structure. The multis for me were fresh, I mean some of the multi syllable may not had rhymed exact according to me but I could see this as a track. I also got to say good lyricism cuz the way you stood to one paticular point from destruction of the Earth to the nourishment from the mother (thats what I think I saw) was consistently dope. The first and last parts were the best parts for me. All in all a dope read, keep it up.
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diggin this shit man. nice rhymes, nice message.
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