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Post by smallsuno » Thu Jan 19, 2012 9:01 am

I feel like some votes received are full of hate,
lames pissed bcuz they lose...like they weren't gonna get baked/

end up with a broken face...for crossin SMALLS foul,
get shook up...and dunked on like that boy Yao/

stuck in the clouds...blowin cali's finest,
crown me your highest...my level you shouldn't try it/

legendary quotes...exploding from my throat,
mention my name...thats greatness you just spoke/

sick and twisted...deadly and demented,
rippin lames apart...yall kids just don't know the business/

for instants...over your head...my punches take flight,
wordplay is sharp as a road spike...im Muhamed Ali when it comes to a lyrical fight/

creative...couragous...dope emcee,
hot boxin a gold M3...with a local triple OG/
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Re: freestyle...

Post by Enlightend » Thu Jan 19, 2012 9:12 am

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Re: freestyle...

Post by smallsuno » Thu Jan 19, 2012 11:16 am

SMALLS UNO AKA THE GRAF RAP GOD

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Post by QwarterZ » Thu Jan 19, 2012 3:43 pm

This was alright, seems like you just started writing
need to up your vocab a lot, and work on your multi's
this kind of style is easy to do but you just need to know what your gonna say
I mean lines like "speak my name, and you just said greatness"
or whatever was cool...like in the 90's, try to get a lil' slicker with that
you'll figure it out sometime

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Re: freestyle...

Post by leeroi green » Mon Jan 23, 2012 8:44 am

remove just from your fourth bar

5th bar add so before demented much better multi and again remove just

final bar switch these, "hot boxin a gold M3...with a local triple OG/"

pretty nice for a free, try to keep your bars even keep drop more you can only get better
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Re: freestyle...

Post by smallsuno » Mon Jan 23, 2012 9:09 am

thanks for the feedback...i appreciate all tips...
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Post by Shooter » Mon Jan 23, 2012 9:28 am

I enjoyed it man. it sounds more like a song rather than a written. So it had that audio flow to it.

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Re: freestyle...

Post by smallsuno » Mon Jan 23, 2012 10:15 am

yeah...i do a lot of recording...I used to do this text shit all the time acouple of years ago...but I got more serious with recording...good lookin on the feedback tho...
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Re: freestyle...

Post by ant_emcees » Thu Feb 23, 2012 1:41 am

not bad hommie keep it up


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