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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q7losWuOIhI[/video]


They say when time's is hard, let your heart be your guiding star
that way when time's is dark, everyone will see that you shine afar..
but still it's easy for blinding thoughts, to stop you right where you are
they say love can blind the heart, so if it slips and breaks, find your parts
if he don't deserve you, he don't deserve you, love doesn't divide apart
it's to be completed, thats why I'm telling you one day you'll find a start
build from the foundation, apply your art, make it oppose but equal all sides
things won't be equal at all times, but it will help you see through all lies
lies that won't creep through, see you, and try to beat you all night...
it's your selection, be you at all times, so you can believe you when it all shines
forget about these small fries, these young'ns who chase you as a trophy
who only disrespect you in public, and try to treat you as a homey
all the words said in his own speech, are always used, misled by his own needs
then your left crying, lonely, saying you shoulda never met him, less grown see?
but your a mature lady, someone who hasn't been sure lately
seeing all the impure and maybe...you've given up but you ain't been sure lately...
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Re: Confused

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all the words said in his own speech, are always used, misled by his own needs

best line in the entire piece... good shit not as moving as nervousness but still good
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yea i agree that line is dope...real good stuff man...i incline u to pick up a mic
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I was feeling this one man
This was a very good verse and a good use multis

Keep up the good work

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