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Ready the weaponry, its vicious raps that we depicted
I'll leave you off balance like your knee caps got twisted
internal organs got shifted, then we'll be editing scriptures
then you'll be held under water like developing pictures
i show no fucking mercy, see im a competitive devil
that would serve you mothafuckas on a molecular level
my flow is so pricey, something you couldnt kindly ignore
killing rappers since ninety three, but i was born in ninety four
see you pussies are shook, but were dismissing you crooks
have you tasting "De-Feat" like you were kissing my foot
then we throw an extra song, discover that your neck is gone
but my optimums are massive like i was batteling with megatron
youll get dropped into space, if you blocking my way
replace your tonsils with pupils so you can watch what you say
pretend to prove the instruments, dropped in a certain incident
you wont see the light like blind folks stabbed with electrical filaments
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Decent..

Basic in parts but multies, structure etc good

"my flow is so pricey, something you couldnt kindly ignore
killing rappers since ninety three, but i was born in ninety four"

confused me

"then you'll be held under water like developing pictures"

Decent punch, fav part
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Ready the weaponry, its vicious raps that we depicted
I'll leave you off balance like your knee caps got twisted
internal organs got shifted, then we'll be editing scriptures
then you'll be held under water like developing pictures
i show no fucking mercy, see im a competitive devil
that would serve you mothafuckas on a molecular level
Pretty decent opener and follow up, right here. The last bar is fucking sick.
youll get dropped into space, if you blocking my way
replace your tonsils with pupils so you can watch what you say
Sick ass bar right there, homie. Good to see you back after being away for awhile. Drop again soon, bruh.
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Re: Freeverse

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Pretty good for a freestyle. Some filler and breaks in the flow here and there but I enjoyed reading it. My favourite line is the same one as Jack's, I thought the whole bar flowed well and the multi was on target. Only advice I could give for a punchline piece like this is to avoid filler but since it was a keystyle I can't really complain. Keep it up.
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Re: Freeverse

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Good looks, haha yeah man i definetely see what ya'll are saying. Havent written in a minute yo :P real talk. but im about to get back into dropping here often man. good to be back
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