How to learn the rules of the game

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How to learn the rules of the game

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I used to break people off at the Space Needle, I
Brought girls to the top and overcharged my Visa Card
Then I had a little thought "Prolly shouldn't be this hard"
Started copyin the players, I just needa dream as far
Right?
Then it happened when I started rappin
All these girls actin more happy than you'd imagine
I got taller and taller, out ballin the ballers
The girls hotter and hotter, time between 'em got smaller
And I
Knew that I was hella fresh to death
Name a fine girl I know that I ain't messed with yet
I got style at the party goin' wild
Don't know if she's laughin at me, but I know I made her smile
And I'm
Straight hyper, never givin a fuck
Catch em off guard, I'll just take a kiss when I want, yup
See the things I'm prepared to do?
Either sweep you off your feet or let my energy carry you

A real spitter, real deal hitter
Say she's out of my league, but homie I'll still get her
With a figure like me, she's figuring her place
I'ma tell her that it's somewhere on second or third base, girl
Just do it... Nike said do it!
Guess that means there ain't a dif-ference of teacher and student
STILL
Spend my card, still love with a passion
With a "head first" plan for not "comin in last"
NOPE!
I'ma do it - bubblegum and other things
Used to call me "fingerprints" - now I'm just the "fuckin king"
Smooth as silk how the kisses are felt
Call it foreplay, use the hands which we were dealt
Hot tongue, so even-if Chris-missed you would melt
And she and I don't hold a title, but she gives me the belt
YUP!
Call another just to see if she comes
Her kisses got me religious how we're speakin in tongues
I mean, you know I love you
I still love you
You're my top girl, I'd never put anybody above you, feel it

But really tho, it's been two plus years
Out of state, I hope you dont mind I got some souvenirs
And I promise I'll be back, Mami
But these hoes act naughty at every single frat party

And I'll be there when the day will come
But for now, it's all good, so
(Let me be the one)
Last edited by NeverOddOrEven on Sun May 27, 2012 10:39 pm, edited 2 times in total.

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Re: How to learn the rules of the game

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This was basic and cliche. Topic is pretty played out. Your structure is sloppy as hell. Flow is hit and miss. It's never really on point. More off than on. Pretty basic multies when you did use 'em. You've got potential though, keep working on it.
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Crunchtime - Thu Aug 26, 2010 9:41 pm
did dosia leave to pursue his youtube rap career, or he still comes here

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short and simple...didn't really impress me
but you kept the whole vibe moving nicely
good job brah

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I'm gonna have my producer send me the unmastered recording of this because you two definitely read it wrong. This is one of the most rhythmic drops I have and it sounds really good on a track.

-- Sun May 27, 2012 1:21 pm --

If you want less audio type writtens and more poetic verses, read any of my other written drops.

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Re: How to learn the rules of the game

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Rhymes wack enough to cut the weeds on my lawn.

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Homie, I could out-write you in my sleep... let's not go there.

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