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its a hotness process, from the floor to the prophets office
with a polished promise to rip it in an honest conference
to the novice pompous, cowards who think they rock it
im clockin pockets raising profits an never pausing off it
i walk an talk it keeping real at moments past and now
i mash my sounds with raps spat fast into half the town
i pack the ground with every footstep made with passion
conveyed compassion towards those who play til tracks end
i slay my dragons fight back with sword in the form of pens
as the storm ascends i perform vocals with a warmer blend
better warn your friends M.D does this shit Full time
with bold rhymes ripping the script with flips an mo shine
i was told i'm, hotter than most me an rap like butter an toast
a cutter of throats quick to hit cha an leave flutterin smoke
the fucker who knows how to do this with pride in self
my vibes ll' melt, faces when I'm spraying outside myself
alive with health so i continue on my grind forever tearing it up
daring and ruff with enough cuts to touch an barely erupt
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This was nice the multi usage was nice and smooth the vibe was decent
I'm feeling the vibe that you brought with this...it was consistent
I felt the beginning with the multi's was great
but about haaaalf way through it seemed like you lost the vibe
either that or you rushed it to get to the second part right away
that may seem like the most resonible action...otherwise a nice drop...keep writing!
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Post by CBK »

fluent with the multi usage, shit just drips off the tongue.

i was told i'm, hotter than most me an rap like butter an toast
a cutter of throats quick to hit cha an leave flutterin smoke

nice lines ^

good post make it longer tho man.
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This was hot bro.. Multies most the way through were mad smooth ...This line was dope
better warn your friends M.D does this shit Full time
with bold rhymes ripping the script with flips an mo shine
Just cause you mentioned me... its a pleasure to rip rhymes with you mate. ;)

Anywho...shit was dope cuz
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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This was hot bro.. Multies most the way through were mad smooth ...This line was dope
better warn your friends M.D does this shit Full time
with bold rhymes ripping the script with flips an mo shine
Just cause you mentioned me... its a pleasure to rip rhymes with you mate. ;)

Anywho...shit was dope cuz
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
̿ ̿'̿'\̵͇̿̿\з=(•̪•)=ε/̵͇̿̿/'̿'̿ ̿ -
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