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Whatever I Am

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Upside down fanatic...grew down in the attic
focused on what was backwards for the fanatics
hated what was left up to them so I'd backflip
on the front it's..just my corresponding actions
reactions grew over time I'm tryna base it quickly
baking soda and sick tea...honey and rice krispies
ash trays, mixed greens..wrote up another sixteen
mixed in with my combo I misled my own thoughts so...
I breed on oblivion..scheme on what's in the cosmos
so I drink up another milky way, bounce in the potholes
my mind grew colossal but I don't fuck with thoughts so...
I forget my position and fall back down to imprisonment
fight God for living and raise demons in childrens sins
grew up militant now you raise flags for my pilgrimage
claim freedom but fight against others and imprison them
because their beliefs ain't the same as our images
senslessness..which brings me back to the beginnin'
take the apple and break down every other limit then..
mix it in with these other dreams I create well with art
Hell veils smarts...and the lust of it all is tell tale hearts
so raise your cards and trade em with the stars one more time
support grind...drug cartels..rewind...now lets import time
base it on prohibition...sub machine guns that would fall apart
AK's or Napolean Bonaparte..switch scenes back to the Holocaust
a common thought of neutralizing the situation, it's all on God
but who am I to decieve when I'm the one lost in the arms of y'all
portray me as evil..no I'm neither just took the form of believers
neither good nor bad..nor religious or percieved as a living seeker
just a manipulation of all before me, a entity raised on concious minds
process what's left and see what's wrong before you process right
and all this progress might show the true evolution of man
in solution I am...neither educated or dumb..pollution or scam
suckin' the blood out the planet and dispensing obnoxious smoke
spreading it further until the stars experience this common cold
my minds twisted right now I can't tell whether I'm living or dead
been given my breath which I use only to produce a image I hold
I'm slippin', I'm broke...so in this very position I hold
I debate on what I am just so everyone can envision my notes
at which point I may be nothing just a writer with hidden agenda I know
it may seem ridiculous or may make no sense towards others
maybe I just came to warn brothers that I'm just the scorn undr..
the breast of Eve...or maybe the heart reign that Julius ceased
or just another figment of the imagination brought to ruins in the East
a sphinx raised my lifeforms of a distant planet for recognition
whatever I am I just try to find a comfortabe spot to sit in
atleast until the next moment I choose to disappear into existance
whatever I am I chose to be it against the will of society
and helped prove to myself that I can be whatever I try to be
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Dude. This is prob the sickest piece I've read from you thus far. Lots of quotables in here. Let me get started.
I forget my position and fall back down to imprisonment
fight God for living and raise demons in childrens sins
grew up militant now you raise flags for my pilgrimage
claim freedom but fight against others and imprison them
because their beliefs ain't the same as our images
senslessness..which brings me back to the beginnin'
take the apple and break down every other limit then..
mix it in with these other dreams I create well with art
Hell veils smarts...and the lust of it all is tell tale hearts
All this flowed smoothly, and it was well said. Indeed.
and all this progress might show the true evolution of man
in solution I am...neither educated or dumb..pollution or scam
suckin' the blood out the planet and dispensing obnoxious smoke
spreading it further until the stars experience this common cold
my minds twisted right now I can't tell whether I'm living or dead
been given my breath which I use only to produce a image I hold
I'm slippin', I'm broke...so in this very position I hold
I debate on what I am just so everyone can envision my notes
This shit was fire, indeed. Some nice lil multies scattered through here embellishing some nice messages and providing a good flow and images.
maybe I just came to warn brothers that I'm just the scorn undr..
the breast of Eve...or maybe the heart reign that Julius ceased
These lines hit me. The shit was deep, my dude. I'm checkin out the other one after this one but some nice work here. Stay up.
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hey man

















thanks :dance:
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suckin' the blood out the planet and dispensing obnoxious smoke
spreading it further until the stars experience this common cold
my minds twisted right now I can't tell whether I'm living or dead
been given my breath which I use only to produce a image I hold
I'm slippin', I'm broke...so in this very position I hold
I debate on what I am just so everyone can envision my notes

Thought this part was done Well. Really well. Flow content everything about this i liked ^


Nice piece Q, look forward to reading more
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this was way dope.. i liked it had a great flow to it.
like the pilgrimage line was my favorite.
Really funking long tho.. like the continuity of the piece and how it kept going just as hard.
nice to see you dropping again man.
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I forgot all about this piece....Ima dope mufucker

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Broke ass lmfao

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thanx for the bump....:) ur so sweet

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Just battle me

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you sound like a moist woman waiting to get entered

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