88SkyLink - multis, punches & wordplays

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88SkyLink
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88SkyLink - multis, punches & wordplays

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I always put emotions in-the-bars, leaving ya holes (whole) like integers
Every 'verse' I spit gets 'respect' like 'Mutual's signature'
'Rip beats' and have them battered-per-chimes, leave them 'tattered-with-rhymes'
Its just a matter-of-time, when I splatter-all-the-latter and attack-with-the-lines
Best believe I'm 'back longer' than a 'ladder-of-spines'
I don't mean 'races~nor~traces', when I say to their~faces in the most possible~cases, that I enter 'Tracks'-with-demise
I'll have your 'bladder-declined', so ya can't 'piss me OFF' like there's a 'urinal-standstill'
So Imma lure-in-examples, as Im pouring-a-sample, of my rhymes cuz they're enough to cause a cure-in-a-tranquil
'Shitting' on haters 'hard' like there's 'manure-in-the-anvils'
I make 'perfect drops' like 'Divers', ensuring-this-man's-ill (ME! ;) not you :naughty: )
Dig graves 'deeper' than'oceans' as I'm guard in/garden the game like a nautical sentries
An oracle said the ... most skilled shall reign, so I claimed the game via forcible-entry
I'm on a 'role killing' no portable-'dead-scene', so bitches 'STOP ya HATE' no'pausable-envy'
YOU, ON TOP? with THAT sound?, I don't think so you inaudible-HEAD-FLEAS
Rip ya HAIR out, go bring a toupee-back, Have you 'beaming' harder than one of Lupes-track
Kill me? Better touché-that, steal pussy lives, you can't even loot-a-cat
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Re: 88SkyLink - multis, punches & wordplays

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You had some pretty cool multies thrown into the mix, with some nice plays on words.
Best believe I'm 'back longer' than a 'ladder-of-spines'
I don't mean 'races~nor~traces', when I say to their~faces in the most possible~cases, that I enter 'Tracks'-with-demise
I'll have your 'bladder-declined', so ya can't 'piss me OFF' like there's a 'urinal-standstill'
So Imma lure-in-examples, as Im pouring-a-sample, of my rhymes cuz they're enough to cause a cure-in-a-tranquil
'Shitting' on haters 'hard' like there's 'manure-in-the-anvils'
^^^ The above was my favorite excerpt. The ladder of spines shit was clean as hell, along with manure in the anvils. Good drop. Stay up.
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i really dug the multi's and wordplay, keep it up man
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I will give you credit, this was pretty enjoyable to read.
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Re: 88SkyLink - multis, punches & wordplays

Post by ScottJames »

i thought different, sorry..
i felt a lot of the multis were forced and made no sense..


'Rip beats' and have them battered-per-chimes, leave them 'tattered-with-rhymes'...... when I splatter-all-the-latter

HUH??

I'm 'back longer' than a 'ladder-of-spines'
THATS A STRETCH^^, (NO PUN INTENDED..)

most possible~cases
^^ DIDNT NEED THAT MULTI


I'll have your 'bladder-declined', so ya can't 'piss me OFF'
FORCED.


YOU, ON TOP? with THAT sound?, I don't think so you inaudible-HEAD-FLEAS
NO.

steal pussy lives, you can't even loot-a-cat
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THE FLOW WAS CHOPPY AS HELL.. I COULDNT CATCH A FLOW FOR ANYTHING.. MULTIS WERE WEAK AND FORCED.. THE PUNCHES WERE WEIRD AND WERE NOTHING HARD HITTING.. ITS ALMOST LIKE THIS SITE IS TOO PUSSY TO LEAVE NEGATIVE FEEDBACK..WTF...
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Re: 88SkyLink - multis, punches & wordplays

Post by Enlightend »

i agree with scott... well not entirely but... multies and punches... not great... wordplay was ok though... flow wasn't horrible... but at some points it did seem choppy... anyways keep droppin
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