SHEET OF ARMOR (The Maneater Edition) FEAT. MONUmental

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SHEET OF ARMOR (The Maneater Edition) FEAT. MONUmental

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

THE VENUS FLYTRAP IS A MANEATER

Kuhlerblynd-

Couldn't fuckin' plan it bro, ripped by a fuckin' animal
Hurt beyond belief, but you agree, it's so understandable
Not duckin' damage so, I put on a Sheet Of Armor
Never to feed the drama, because reaping seeds of farmers
Like those won't bring the peace of Karma, respect and honor
Leaves a kid's face deep in the chest of mama, death's upon ya
Pain which makes ya caress ya daughters like the best of fathers
Sorrow hits below the belt, it's felt like hell's depths have bombed ya
Like heroin injects will calm ya, rock ya, this can't be reality
The emotions seem to battle me, the scars rattle me
In the dreams I bleed savagely, can't believe it's happening
Hit with speeds so drastically fast to me, Stop! We have to breathe
Suffication has captured heaves of air in this old room
Should've been able to expose truths, but I guess I don't know you
These walls painted so blue, it's practically a tint of purple
Play with fire, shit will burn you, screaming it meant to hurt you
Those demons curse you, hits you hard now, rip ya heart out
Shit in yards found outside ya fucking kitchen wall, pal
Fight the charge now, fuckin' fists just fall down, knowing ya fate
Is to be thrown in a cage until your soul she will take

MonuMental-

This carnivorous creation has me battered and bruised,
Shattered in two, marinating in her cavernous bloom,
The confrontation has really left me kinda convinced,
That my salvation has got to be a higher defense,
A sheet of steel to sheathe me, put fire beneath me,
Relieve me from the feelings I get as she eats me,
I wanna breathe free, and no drama is she bequeathing,
If I feed until she weeps and her inner leaves breach,
This is unsolvable, metaphorically it's unstoppable,
Outlook is ominous, not for one of us but all of us,
Almost calls to thought a softened touch, a succubus,
The kind that loves you up, eats you after you fuck,
So as battle rattles my husk with ravenous thrusts,
From an animal's tusks that lacerate what they touch,
I get to making it up, plans to emancipate, bust,
Free from this tortuous room of planned aggravation,
I thrash and crash through it's insides, rip asunder,
Brash, unvalued truths I'd tried to live up under,
I break free, stomp it, choke it and as it dies,
In the light I see my armor was a delusional lie

AND DARKNESS CONSUMES AS THE VICIOUS VENUS CLAMPS HER JAWS CLOSED...


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Kuhler: I like the AZ style flow you have on this. This displayed a great usage of multies.

Monu: Consistant as usual, you never go lower than the standard you set.

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The CIA needs to scope this, cause this actual intelligence.
Leaves a kid's face deep in the chest of mama, death's upon ya,
Pain which makes ya caress ya daughters like the best of fathers,
Sorrow hits below the belt, it's felt like hell's depths have bombed ya
That was sexy.

Can i quote Monu's entire post? No? Well...I liked that part of it. Your on another level, you don't want my opinions.

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Post by 88SkyLink »

Damn .. dope collab man. I thought this wouldn't work @ first, cuz kuhler is all about punches, wordplay & multis and Monu is all about flow, multis, vocabulary. But both the verses complemented each other pretty well. Both ya go in hard in different ways, and to see them combined was ill.
Kuhler has some ill multis, flow and some hella good punches. It sounded a little forced IMO, but that would be asking for too much, it was nice man.
Monumental had some Ill flow and some funky-ass multis. I couldn't really say anything bad about ur verse. I WOULD say that u should try to add some Metaphors and metaphors, but that wud kinda change the way u write ur shit, so stick to urself.
All in all, this was a dope collab ... keep it up the both of you, peace
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Post by QwarterZ »

This was a niiiiice collab...I'm feeling the vibe you guys brought
it gave me that 90's feel...back when dudes used to go hard on a topic
both of y'all had some nice multi's the flow's were crafty and consistent
I think Monu did his thing on this one though...the vibe was just wild
Kuhler...u did your thing to..you set the pace and pow it just came together...nice drop guys

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Thanks for the feed guys. It's really appreciated.
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Uppin. Murk and I never really saw many thoughts on this piece.
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both went hard, that face in mamas titties line was sick, wow
stoned locomotion, im highly trained, flow fluid with pricy strains

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