Trapped (Seeking Freedom)

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Trapped (Seeking Freedom)

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Alright, it's been awhile...

It's an invasion like I been caged in, enraged with
How I became faceless among the ranks since
My reality came then, pushed me out the play pen
Made me exchange it for a suit and a briefcase when
I dont want to be famous, locally, for something nameless
Where words have no range it's more like a pain meant
To batter this heart and break it, nothing to replace it
Trying to retain grips before I go insane, which
Has probably flooded my brain thick, like a train hit
While life's rain spits about re-living this same twist
Like it's my day to day fix and, to date, kicks
My ass, bringing back this hatred, of where my fame sits
When I'd rather trade it all for a bucket of today's piss
Which wouldnt change bits or pieces of life's lameness
No sugar, whole grain mix, smiles without a face lift
Success level below basements, such ordinary statements
Chicks, I gave up the chase quick, most of ya'll aint shit
Looking for a replacement is like chewing up a fake brick
Swing for fences, barely get base hits, I cant take it
I wouldnt do it over again, who would wanna replay this?!?
Instead I'd shake clips until my body takes six
Bullets aimed for placement in my chestplate, ribs
Til they create rips, tear through me then stick eight kids
Ending a lost soul, tasteless, seeming to reach for greatness......
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Re: Trapped (Seeking Freedom)

Post by Proverb »

Great post man keep em comin
Keep comments to yourself cause I heard enough chatter,
hang you by ya throat wit a rope soaked in venom of a Puff Adder

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Multi Master, shit was dope.

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Re: Trapped (Seeking Freedom)

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Yo man, this shit went INSANE with some nasty ass multies. The shit was dope, bruh. Great schemes and flow throughout also added toppings to this pizza...shit ended up delicious. Great drop and enjoyable read, fam.
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and now I'm trapped in the closet SO I PULL OUT MY GUN...


lol

nah dope piece my man.. great flow, constistant rhythm good drop
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Looks like all that was need to be said was said, multies were sexy "Chicks, I gave up the chase quick, most of ya'll aint shit
Looking for a replacement is like chewing up a fake brick" word to that.
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Re: Trapped (Seeking Freedom)

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

I really appreciate the feed. Was going for the same rhyme scheme throughout this piece. Glad to get a little feed off it. If anyone wants me to feed something, just let me know and I'll to it when I can.
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