88SkyLink - Multies

[88SkyLink]

Fakers be LACKING ALL FACTORS, Stunting like RADICAL ACTORS
But they can't pop their collar even if they had CLAVICLE FRACTURES
See success like OPTICAL SENSES, haters fall like broken OBSTACLE FENCES
Clashing me will COST YOUR DEFENCES, cuz I fire haters like they LOST AN APPRENTICE
Lyrics got that HOSPITAL PEN SHIT, cuz my bars so ill - I provide SICKLY IMPRISONMENT
I PITY THE DILIGENCE, these bitches try, so I fed-her-lines/FEDERLINE to death for free, call it BRITTANY FOR DIVIDENCE
Show no love, better KISS THE FIST, got ya lights out like I HIT A SWITCH
Them haters be where the GLITTER IS/GLITORIS, cuz these 'pussies stand out', spit sick on they ass, no anal SYPHILIS
Oh Why you LITTLE BITCH, aint you know my flow can't be UNDERMINED
Cuz I go deep when I cast ASUNDER RHYMES, Im on the throne while you haters down got me UNDERLINED
This entire rap game is of my REGION, require only bars to slaughter LEGIONS
Shit, I spit so much, never finish, the antonym of COMPLETION
I “run” they minds which dies so pale, I see one “Achilles Heel” bitch
Give these “blind” bitch “knives for Braille”, to see if they really “feels” this
End a chapter, another addition to never ENDING THE THESIS, Bullets rhymes leave you wholly/holy like ya DEPENDING ON JESUS
still 'move people' with lines from my 'thoughts', TELEKINESIS

-- Fri Aug 26, 2011 8:52 pm --

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/life- ... 23564.html
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[For Real]

The start was dope. Punches were pretty good and the vocab was great, mixed with a good flow and nothing really forced. Following BRITNEY FOR DIVIDENCE, from then on really loses consistancy. The punches start to lack a little bit, and you drop down just two syllables in some of the rhymes, with some not even being great, so compair that to the form you set off with, large multiple syllable rhymes with several nice punches scattered throughout, it really doesent highlight your top points. Obviously you started with some dope lines, and wanted to make a piece off of it. You seemed like you just rushed out afer your original concept, which decreased the line quite a lot. You are dope, but make sure you think longer, and then you can be dropping high calibre stuff.

[MonuMental]

Fakers be LACKING ALL FACTORS, Stunting like RADICAL ACTORS
But they can't pop their collar even if they had CLAVICLE FRACTURES
See success like OPTICAL SENSES, haters fall like broken OBSTACLE FENCES
Clashing me will COST YOUR DEFENCES, cuz I fire haters like they LOST AN APPRENTICE
Lyrics got that HOSPITAL PEN SHIT, cuz my bars so ill - I provide SICKLY IMPRISONMENT
I PITY THE DILIGENCE, these bitches try, so I fed-her-lines/FEDERLINE to death for free, call it BRITTANY FOR DIVIDENCE
Show no love, better KISS THE FIST, got ya lights out like I HIT A SWITCH
Them haters be where the GLITTER IS/GLITORIS, cuz these 'pussies stand out', spit sick on they ass, no anal SYPHILIS
Oh Why you LITTLE BITCH, aint you know my flow can't be UNDERMINED
Cuz I go deep when I cast ASUNDER RHYMES, Im on the throne while you haters down got me UNDERLINED
This entire rap game is of my REGION, require only bars to slaughter LEGIONS
Shit, I spit so much, never finish, the antonym of COMPLETION

All of the above was fire as fuck, imo. After the last line I quoted you kinda fell off. It had a sloppier feel to it. But from what I did quote, you fucking snapped. I think if you wanna do a multi oriented piece, just be sure that you have it going just as hard all the way through as you did for most of it, ya feel me? Other than that I enjoyed it. I felt that you absolutely killed the part I quoted. Stay up, man.

[88SkyLink]

thx 4 da commens ... UPPIN

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[plague_arsonist]

sick like real said it was bumpin and it slowed down at the brittany line so the consitancy shook a bit but it was pure heat all the way thru keep up the good work

[Arvincible]

very good start with the clavicle line i was like ooooooohh!! haha


britney line was kinda forced but it was still a good attempt.

glitter is line was wack haha

i like the multis definately stand out, the direction n flow was straight but the substance fell off after the britney bar..

ur not bad man u have battle potential, and if you can write more with a message u can probably kill it in many topics.. keep it up 88 !

[88SkyLink]

thnx 4 da feeds man ... peace

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[Kause mc]

Fire man! Ay this is worth recording so y not record it man? I wanna hear this on a dope beat for sure! Great multis imo fam. 1

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[ippiki_17]

I liked the way you delivered your rhymes, it's what reeled me in, but the more I began to read your verse it seemed like it lost its structure with the punchlines. The multi's and everything were dope, but I just wish I could've read it all the way through like the way it started.

[88SkyLink]

Thanks for the feeds

[Kuhlerblynd]

I thought you did really well with your multi's here. I have to agree, it started dropping off at the end, but you had several lines that stood out to me (all are previously mentioned and quoted). I thought you did really well with your flow too, except for those really long lines that had quite a few more syllables than the line previous/following them. Other-wise, seems like you are stepping up your game nicely man. Good job.