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didnt know whether to put this in poetry or here.



Blurry sight, late at night, blank stares at the dark sky/
Havent blinked for hours, fixed on watching the stars fly/
The endless space beyond the light, as far as the eyes see/
As i lie, dreams of bigger things seem to rest themselves beside me/
But im im still hooked on the emptyness, the void space above me/
And wondering, how it seems worthless elevating to nothing/
But could i make it something? Build an empire out of thoughts/
Turn bronze to gold, build a castle from a crowd of rocks/
And withouta cost, cuz nothing is nothing, and nothing it'll be/
Cold world in space, catching heat from a meteor streak/
Tall above all, grinning wide eye'd and standing proud/
Hand me it all, consume the universe, but i'd puke the planets out/
And what then have i consumed? Nothing but burning gasses and dust/
Im saying no thank you to that, i'll stay right here, im passing it up/
So i'll stay in the spot that im in, fukk the ship, yall can hop on first/
Cuz im just fine and dandy with my dirt and rocks on earth

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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Tall above all, grinning wide eye'd and standing proud/
Hand me it all, consume the universe, but i'd puke the planets out/

i Thought that was Dope Really Creative Verse And Really great aspects in your verse great read'
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word. thanks man!

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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Bruh thts deep as poetry but as a rap, its deeper than the word itself, sickening...dope post bruh

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she was pretty tight man. liked the imagery and the flow in it. eh..im not as thorough as i used to be with my feedback. gotten lazy over the years
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Nice images you painted in my head with this one. It's just telling me, fuck the bullshit, be happy with what you have. Sometimes too much is never enough. Positive message, and a dope way to say it. Props, bruh.
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