88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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I like the tone you took with this topic. You mixed that with a nice flow and made it enjoyable to read.
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Skylink i trust ya man....
this shit was tight and it has a deep feeling inside..
i dig man.......... keep @ it
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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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Thanks for the feed man... appreciate it
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deep shit man, great multi's through the entire peice keep it up man
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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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I think that the compliments are pretty much self explanatory, some great vocab scattered about this piece, and a few nice schemes. However, the flow in some parts just hit me as choppy because of how lengthy some lines were. I dunno how you'd spit it, but some parts just read long, if that makes any sense to you? Anyway, the topic is a bit played out, but you did your thing on it and no one can fault you for that. Pretty nice drop overall. Stay up.
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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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thnx 4 dat yall
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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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Nice drop. And i would quote the same things Arv and TOYH did!! Those would be mah favorite lines too.


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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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Im not one for long comments... Good views on government and religion...flowed pretty well too. Pretty dope drop.
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Re: 88SkyLink - Bars for my survivors

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This was alright man it's a topic that's done a lot so unless there's some originality to it, it will bore me to death. This kept my interest though. Your 1st bar helped that, I thought it hit as hard as an opening bar should. Flow and rhymes were cool I liked the random switches on the inners etc they helped keep things fresh in my opinion. Some lines were a bit bland but the perspective on some was unique and interesting. Best examples of that would be the opening bar and the 2 Arv quoted above. Good shit keep droppin.
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