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I Need Criticism From the Illest Lyricists Uncompleted Verse

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Who's giving me a sign like Aries
To come in the game blowing up
Like military incendiaries
Vocabulary is equivalent to libraries
Equilibrium is never off, why tell me lies
Lye in a mound of my feces
From the bottom of the ground
To the sky, precede, to your first rank
Front lines you hurt on the first day
For my rhymes I conserve energy like earth day
And at the moment I am fully loaded
I click it to open the barrel and I burst things
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Post by Defiance »

good start.. some shit didnt hit that well.. but a good start.. try more complexities such as multis and meta4s
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Dude I'm familiar with multis, but what are meta4s enlighten me
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Here you go Lazers... It's alot to read, but it will help you learn what different terms mean and how to use them more effectively.

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/text- ... t3038.html
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rules wrote:ALL new drops (Audio & Written) must come with TWO LINKS pertaining to RECENT feed you've left. Failure to comply will result in your Written or Audio being locked. If it is locked, please PM me or one of the Mods/Administrators the links, we will unlock it for you.

Being new to this section I won't lock this up, but please comply or I'll have to.

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it was a decent drop bro..good start..can elevate fer sure off it..one
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Thanks everyone time to revise
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Fine. Locked till u pm me links.

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