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NO SURVIVAL

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Lies, pain, guilt, fights, shame, still no survival, no survival/
Temparary rise, in my life you came, but now its my demise, wrecked like a train...and theres no survival.../

The pain when i speak, shows my brain that im weak/
Layin on the concrete, admist the rain on. The street/
All apologies for all the times ive never put you first/
When id rather do some dirt, thats why it didnt work/
all the other bitches that i had, didnt mean as much as you did/
Emotions going to shit, im feelin stupid/
Boutsa lose it, gettin too sick, and im sure you feel the sickness, you/
Gave me all your love but now i needin your forgivness too/
Its sad to see, you givin your all for a tragedy/
You see thatd ive had defeat, headed downhill so gradually/
And your mad at me, but how am i to blame you?/
Im bounded to the game, and my heart is what your chained to/
When i came thru, you dropped it all, you stopped n stalled/
Realized that i got the ball, tried to shoota 3 n missed/
Now ive lossed it all, it seemed to have popped the ball/
Now im off to fall, didnt ever wanna be in this/

I remember when we thought it was love at first site/
Spent the first night, cuddlein devoloped the worst type/
Of love, kisses n hugs spawed an unhealthy obsession/
And all the other fella jockin Didnt help thee agression/
Sat there stressin, while you was off dickin around/
Come bakk smellin like cologene and grubby dick in y our mouth/
I wonder whose dicks in you now, i bet its one of my homies/
Slowly breakin my sanity, ive wished youve never known me/

I gave my all for her, then she left me, broken hearted/
Swallowed my pride to deal with what i delt with, all the nights spent fighting really seemed to be so hellish, she showed a smile the departed/

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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I feel the animosity and the pain. I dig it and I can relate to it heavily. Sometimes, I wanna kill that fucking bitch, because I love her so much I hate her.
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Excellent drop!
Real talk. I just got out of a one and
a half year relationship but i completely
relate to this dude. Great written.
Lookin forward to more bro
Stay up

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I like it... emotions were on point... lyrically better then other stuff ive seen from you
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this is pretty fuckin coo man, you gonna use this for a song? shit would be pretty fire...
The Meek Shall Prosper... So they say :P
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yeah actually ima record it here in the next few days...
the beat is dope, and the sound im hopin to get outta it is finna get some recognition.

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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i went to ya site on reverdnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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yo man that means alot. most def cata. thanks homie

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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in a girls perspective, i like the emotion u showed and the way u expressed urself good job! :)
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That was dope yo' Its A Good Piece Everything Just Fit In Natrully. Great Job
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word. thanks van and faze.. got it recorded. post it as soon as i can..

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Catastropic wrote:i went to ya site on reverbnation, and i heard ya' projects bro, i must say they real damn good...
at ya' age you have a 5star skillz,
and believe you're gonna make in the music biz.
i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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