Death becomes you (unfinished)

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Death becomes you (unfinished)

Post by Grim »

need another verse or two but want feed on what i got so far....


CHORUS X 2:
DEATH BECOMES YOU..IT STANDS BEFORE YOU
BATTLE SCARS LACERATIONS AND WAR WOUNDS
I GOT MORE GOONS..CREATIN’ MORE TOMBS
SO YOU MAY FIND YOU FACES ON THE FLOOR SOON.


I walk amongst the corpses in the valley of death.
I’m the only troop I need but I can rally the rest.
Try to get within a fifth of my death talley at best.
I’ll turn each street I walk into an alley of flesh.
Yes I’m sick..I’m infected with illness.
I spit clips and I’m after those millions.
A God Damn wrecking ball crashing thru buildings.
I create orphans and that is YOUR children.
Immaculate killing…perfection personafied.
This track is the case and my verse is the bomb inside
It’s a homicide when killer tracks and my mind collide.
Tastefully murderous like fine wine Cyanide.
Leave you breathless..hung like a necklace
Soap opera..I’m YOUNG and I’m RESTLESS.
You don’t wanna test this..gauge’ll leave you chestless
I eat rage for breakfast and by noon I’m feeling reckless!!!

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Re: Death becomes you (unfinished)

Post by Alvin »

Drop 2 links of feedback you gave or this will get locked up...

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-- Mon Jun 20, 2011 6:58 am --

Locked up, pm me the links and ill unlock this
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