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Addictions.

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/miser ... ml#p174391
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Life.. Listen

I sit around with the crew, and pass around the bong and the spliff
not giving a fuck, turning a blind eye to really how wrong that it is
It's like i'm gone in the mist, while smoking an ounce for the stress
I've been raided twice, and spent 3 months sitting alone on house arrest
i was down and messed, the feeling of court had me about to drop nuts
you won't understand what scott does, but i was realived not to get locked up
the pot buzz? my mates tried to quit, but it's true many stay stuck
i still do it sometimes, but i'm high on life, thats my only every day drug
many pennies saved up, i was depressed as shit, and actually broke as fuck
I've had people tell me it was literally embarassing to even know this cunt
dope and stuff, had me fucked up but now i've got better, got my brain in order
Smoking out a dirty chamber, and would be to stoned to go and change the water
my aim was sorta, to give everything up, but i couldnt deal with the crap at the time
I thought i could do it for me, but i always had you sitting in the back of my mind
back on the pipe, i couldn't go back to it, so now my week days are free
I rap about this shit cause i want to, but i guess it even sounds cleashay to me
I don't think anyone will know, what i've seen or faced on the streets
but to be honest, what's the point of it, and getting chased by police
what i've laced on the beats, i'm proud.. that i've taken off on both wings
peoples lives are pretty fucked, and shit.. but only if you new most things..




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i liked this piece here man.. alot of emotion and real shit.. but i cant help but read it with an australian accent.. liked the fact that you put real shit in there

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I don't think anyone will know, what i've seen or faced on the streets
but to be honest, what's the point of it, and getting chased by police
what i've laced on the beats, i'm proud.. that i've taken off on both wings
peoples lives are pretty fucked, and shit.. but only if you new most things..
Those were some sick bars, my friend. I've spoken on shit like this before. Addictions are a kinda cliched subject, I guess, but always a valid one to speak on, especially when you site your own personal experiences to spice up the story telling aspect. Good shit.
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I gotta co sign with Monumental on that chased by Police line and the ones after. This was a real piece about real problems. I can def relate about the court bullshit and drugs. Keep spittin. looks like this rap outlet seems to bring out some dope bars.
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I can always appreciate real talk. Keep it up man, I loved it.

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Hey man good to see a new post from you! This is sick i like this verse bro u know what type of writtens i like n this is def one. Great verse

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i was feeling this multies were real nice subject is used alot... but its a classic that never gets old... and u did well with it... but its nice to see someone that fully understands multies... i here good multies/rhyme scheme alot but i dont always actually see them....
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thanks for the feed yo
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Nice rap I think that you should make it longer though. Real shit though yo.
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i like this imma fan of deep music shit u gotta dig deep 2 write bars 4 keep it up bro
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This is great. It conveys great emotion and what I like to call "subtle aggression" in some areas. I'd love to hear this recorded as I would understand a few more things about this.

I'm an absolute full fan of Multi's and you did them perfectly - great job. Great read.
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