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Bitter Hatred

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I choke on blood invoked by provoking what I'm facing,
Replacement from reflections, say my faith's a shallow basin,
I've erased the hate I've strived to take to levels most have hated,
Abated for none, no breaks to shun the creation of my status,
The greatest of greats down to the fakest of fakes,
Can't lie to god or the mirror when viewed dead in the face,
My chemical states form chains of pain meant to rack a brain,
Track a vein with junkie flows, get a taste and sign your name,
I've taken flame and tamed it to dance upon my lips,
Spit shit that rips grips clean outta the fingertips,
Of assassins, foul hits that could never see a payday,
The rest that scope my chest had best request a pay raise,
The darkest days lighten up when the ground spews forth,
My form to signify the coming of a being forlorn,
I have prophecies unfold from the top to the bottom see,
Left is right, so leave the fight cause victory belongs to me,
A prodigy with knowledge and rottage within my values,
Mottled with blood and old dues, heart stoppage surrounds fools,
That scrounge news to search to birth a weakness just to kill me,
Fill me with ill deeds and stand fast to utter shrill screams,
This pill means I can shed a mask of blasted bastardly,
Titles and rightful nights full of bone cracks so dastardly,
I'm fast to be the last to bleed so come with full force,
In the face of evil tastes of blood and guts in hellish fire storms,
I'm tried and true, necrosing into black from the blue,
Comatose hues that bruise and lose the views by the time it's round two,
I'm down to the grounds, I'm takin bounds, It's now I quicken hell,
Thoughts of death make up my mold I'm composed of "sickle" cells.
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Re: Bitter Hatred

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this seemed more like a hip hop poetry piece. which is what i dig. well thought out.

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Re: Bitter Hatred

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Appreciate it, bruh.

-- Fri Jun 10, 2011 11:57 am --

Appreciate it, bruh.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
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Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

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Re: Bitter Hatred

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Wow mental, well first off the way the bars were put together with last word ryhmes was real nice. I like all your shit, but I must admit I prefered the WTF cypher shit you dropped. My fave lines were:
my chemical chains form chains of pain meant to rack a brain//
track a vein with junkie flows, get a taste and sign your name//

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Good shit, man. Appreciate it!!
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With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
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Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

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im SERIOUSLY feeling this man! like wow
your style is very poetic and i love that while im reading, your flow and mulits were on point. you used words that arent used often, which is DEFINETLY a posotive trait to have while rhyming. over all this is a master piece! definetly one to remember!
keep it coming bro!
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Appreciate ya bruh!! Thanks for the feed.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
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Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

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this shit flow well whn i read it, you`ve got talent bro.. kinda complex to me
i liked it alot man keep @ it.

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Thanks for the feed, man.
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

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Re: Bitter Hatred

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this was my type of piece, creative, excellent use of vocabulary. flow was hitting when i spit it. intensely dark and capitivating. nice drop monumental.. a piece like this breathes intelligence good shit man oh and thanks for always hitting up my piece.. feed from you means something cause you got skills to back it
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Re: Bitter Hatred

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Already, bruh. I give props where props are due!!
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

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I thought it was pretty sick, had a nice rhyme scheme and good
flow throughout. Did get a bit choppy at some points but the whole
thing was dope.

I choke on blood invoked by provoking what I'm facing,
Replacement from reflections, say my faith's a shallow basin,
I've erased the hate I've strived to take to levels most have hated,
Abated for none, no breaks to shun the creation of my status,
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Re: Bitter Hatred

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Duely noted and taken into consideration, bruh. Thanks for the feed!!!
[center]Peel back the facade and behold a bold insanity,
With no repose or vanity, composed of inhumanity.[/center]
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[center]Illest Awards For 2011:
Text MC of the Year- MonuMental
Class of 2011- MonuMental, Enlightend, 3rd String, CBK, and Pest
Writer of the Year- MonuMental
Written of the Year- MonuMental 'A Series of Unfortunate Events'[/center]

[center]a-series-of-unfortunate-events-vt23866.html[/center]
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Re: Bitter Hatred

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pretty nice :clap: i spit it fast was pretty ill keep it up
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Re: Bitter Hatred

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really complex barz, alot of content, nice 8)
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