*THE SLAUGHTER!!*

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*THE SLAUGHTER!!*

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heres a taste of the lyrical collection, the spiritual obsession/
knowledge sugests you invest in physicle protection/
it's a definit aggression, every verse is a explosive confession/
so might i mention venomous rhymes are the corrosive projection/
the show is something you should go to see, life is something you should owe to me/
the sick notery was inscribed since i was in my mothers ovaries/
i spit this flow so soberly, keep counting like a religious rosary/
love is what they show to me a rapper representing the paki over seas/
come face the elite, every bar absurd and simply discrete/
i repeat another rappers dead and now my diaries complete/
your flow is starting to deplete, your falling from the heat/
hit the street i guess these phony rappers are finally admitting defeat/
i'll crisp your skin into leather, your as soft as pillow feathers/
so your ricocheting of my fists in the violent and storming weather/
you'll never be as clever, i got a magical mandible so your feeling pressure/
but damn i got you headless just by holding the scepter and spitting this lecture/
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Man this was sicccckkkk, loadsa excellent lines, counting rosaries was my favourite. The flow was on point, I lost myself as I was Reading it, good good shit, keep em coming bro, u have massive potential.

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baha damn Thank you dude. i will be suer to comeback stronger every time
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good flow ,keep on keeping it on!
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thanks, will do
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This was niiiice, the multi's were off the chain
and the flow of it seemed to go together nicely
seems like you were on some of that Pun shit for a moment
really nice work though...can't wait to see more from you
keep writing!
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word up dude. and ima keep it coming XD
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i like the flow bro..keep it up..hope to see you in that battle forum
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word up thanks
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this is the first shit i ever read on here....
it was fuckin dope man
flow was on point/ multies bring out the structure
overall good shit man keep @ it.

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word up thanks ma dude!
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word up
thx i ll keep that in mind

-- Thu May 26, 2011 10:01 pm --

i forgot to seperate the line where the flow of it kinda dwindles. but its all good
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Post by Mic S »

Yezzir wrote:This was a pretty dope drop over all. You brought some pretty dope concepts. Nothing outstanding though. It seemed to fall off around the second half of the piece/verse. Wish ya would've stayed consistent throughout the entire drop. If ya did this piece would've been a killer.


heres a taste of the lyrical collection, the spiritual obsession/
knowledge sugests you invest in physicle protection/
it's a definit aggression, every verse is a explosive confession/
so might i mention venomous rhymes are the corrosive projection/
the show is something you should go to see, life is something you should owe to me/
the sick notery was inscribed since i was in my mothers ovaries/
i spit this flow so soberly, keep counting like a religious rosary/

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Ya deffo killed these here opening bars. I was like ohh shit. This is gonna be a killer verse. Then ya kinda fell off like I said.

Overall t his was a pretty dope drop. You've showed that ya got potential just stay with it. Next time just try to stay a little more consistent.

he hit it on the button...

I enjoyed this better than the other one.... flow was more consistent.. you still are showing strong vocab

I enjoyed this - dope drop... I'd give more feed but Yezzir nailed it to the tee
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