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I apply fatigue, its scrutiny to cop with me
apply the gap in the seven seas 'the aftermath is everyone's after me'
apocolyptic amongst this hip-hop hipocerisy
*ill push back ya wig than flee* if you try too step to me
ya Bars aren't heavy like they entered the Odessey!!
my artistry is a-part of me
i can circle the earth with an ounce of my velocity
incohairent with Gore i cause malicousness like trojans in war!!
ya bars leave zzz's like an imbodiment of a bore
face it before you enter the door *ill dis-mantle your mantle & Core*
and it aint even profound as my maxinum force
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Complex. I see you.

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It was basic but you can call it complex lol
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Thats pretty dope dude...
face it before you enter the door *ill dis-mantle your mantle & Core*
and it aint even profound as my maxinum force
that was aiight but not enough to showcase ya skills
BANG BANG!!!! I Shot U Down
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wow im being slept on.

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thanks flipside really apprciate the comment, you to m33k91
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Post by pest »

shits filthy man, i like the rhyme schemes.
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i love ya' sht...most definitely...
keep up the good work bro!
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thanx dude
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Post by Shawnmd »

pretty good, tho a couple of extra lines would make it even better.
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Thanks
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