MURDEROUS INTENTIONS

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MURDEROUS INTENTIONS

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1 shell,2 shells,3shells,4
continue the process and add twelve more.
10 guns, a hundred clips spraying bullets galore.
10 thugs run in your crib leaving puddles of gore.
A menacing master of mayhem and malicious murder
Murking for certain with a caliber to cranium merger.
I'll bring the heat to your grill and turn beef to burger.
Tough as nails at first..till you see my burner.
They always act ready for "war" till my Desert(eagle)Storms.
"You wouldn't like me when I'm angry" it's an unpleasant form.
A beast, an animal, with savage intentions.
I feast, like cannibals, and ravage intestines.
Like the Grand Canyon I leave a lasting impression.
Blow your head clean off like extremely fast decompression.
Clash with this Titan..I'll flash fists of lightnin'.
And blast clips when fighting..get ya ass whipped..it's frightnin'
You'll REAP what you sow when Grimm puts you below.
Only God knows the direction that your soul will go.
Which matters not to me..I'll scatter blocks with ease.
Step up like a batters box and you'll drop to your knees.
When Grimm is the aggressor death's the only option.
Mixing me with society is a vile concoction.
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Post by Loon E Lou »

This shit was ill man! Real dope shit here. I like shit like this. Nice word play wit some clean multies. Whole piece was worth the read. Flowed really well, wich is perfect for me. Nice drop man

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Drops like these are EXTREMELY PLAYED, please refrain "dropping" poo-cheese. But not all was lost, for what it was I'd give it a 7/10

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Post by thadevious1 »

I think this was allright foe a battle verse
you had some nice lines in there and some decent punches
most was a bit played but you made it rhyme nice
flow was water
nice job
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Post by Temp5 »

Sick multies and vocab. Also threw in some alliteration in there nice. Keep it up bro

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Post by amexicano »

Nice post.

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Post by powerwhee »

I liked it alot your use of alliteration in the beginning set the flow up for the rest of the verse from the very beginning and i agree the "A beast, an animal, with savage intentions. I feast, like cannibals, and ravage intestines." line was really good and probably the best part of the verse other than the desert eagle rhyme which was tight too. Good job

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Post by 32neilz »

Nice Grimm

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Post by Static »

nice grimm, but i agree with thadevious1 it seems more like a battle verse. great multi's and overall rhymes
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Post by M33Kish »

Diz shit hot regardless, da rhymes is so fuckin slik.

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Post by Immortal Jav »

i was feeling the shit dawg it was slick. 8-)

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