Spazzin' out

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DaPrince
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Spazzin' out

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Just playing around with similar sounding syllables
this is the beat I wrote it too, it goes from 00:12 to 01:12:
http://www.shadowville.com/1453/genres/ ... crime-life


From written flows to kickin' raps, I'm rippin tracks by spittin' facts
and simply killin' cuz still I have, for real, the illest pen and pad
Leave beats in a hearse, when I release a new verse
to be a perfect emcee is really my purpose on earth
at birth I was distinguished to extinguish kings and usurp
challenge my talent and you're bound to see a genius at work
visit my vicinity and see lyrically it's absurd
cuz me myself and I, no lie, are first second and third
I emerged with a surplus of words from a furnace-like fortress
now every mic that I find, my rhymes burn 'em like torches
You can't pass my mental class, I laugh at foes failing courses
tracing stencils with pencils while I'm Van Gogh painting portraits
I'm the Best...no second guess, just better than the rest
more clever than whoever, hotter than a sweater vest
and three coats on a heated boat in the throat of a volcano
strike surgically with hyperbole, verbally above your plateau
so so sorry for constantly mystifying and providing
awe-inspiring rhyming with perfect timing
call me Jet Lightning because I'm plane electrifying
shining, blinding and it's frightening cuz I'm not even trying
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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Re: Spazzin' out

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Shit was fuckin sick, bruh. Everything was on point, in my opinion. I wouldn't change shit. Stay up.
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Re: Spazzin' out

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Preciate the feed back bro
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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Re: Spazzin' out

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yeah this was some good shit had some multis that were str8 on point. had some good lines nothing that really jumped off the page. but a good flow for sure.. keep um coming man
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