It could never be you and I, as far as the eye can see
always blind from tears and the scars are kinda deep
over bullshit, constant headaches, no nights of sleep.
Frustrating when you love, the love's putrid from a mile
used to think we going strong, holidays we held it down
but the best part is YO we have a CHILD!
I'll be polite, and calm down
make a visit, even stay awhile
But that's it.
and don't compare me to him
this weed good, my inner thoughts have a weird influence
The man in mirror appears to be as I used to be
it's no use, I'm used to we
being the way that I'm used to... why you callin' me ?
voice-mail fulla deposits
and I'll try ignore it, start a text conference
and only return the brief pause for a slight importance
it ain't no accident, hope ya happy with your insurance
Adultery
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dude.......Im in the same damn situation...except I have two kids....this was short but on point....I don't normally critique pieces that seem like poetry or are emotional but good job.,....you got me trippin on my ex off that shit good job lol
I CHANNEL all my ENERGY,
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//
I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//
I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
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Re: Adultery
like fatal x was saying this is realy EMO rap ...
but never the less it's heartfelt and has some good inner thoughts
I like how you made this simple for anyone to get into and relate with
nice concept for a track
you should try writing a 2nd verse
keep up
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but never the less it's heartfelt and has some good inner thoughts
I like how you made this simple for anyone to get into and relate with
nice concept for a track
you should try writing a 2nd verse
keep up
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