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Murk and the 7 dwarfs - Fetch this Bitch

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/ripp-vt20287.html

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/high- ... 20066.html










Whoa, i thought your crew had more skill than that Murk. Smh




anyways, Fall back cuz you've been Collectivlly killed!








I was born to make you punks cry, so watch these kids get torn and ate like lunch-time
you can't be serious Murk ... with those whack kids in yah crew who can't Formulate a punch-line
show them the door and make them chumps hide; Q's the hardest and Murks Crew's the target
hey murk i got Somrthing to tell, ditch those kids and just put 'punch on the shelf' like a supermarket
E-makulate Bitch, we mak-ing Paper, while these weak dudes set out to sway the haters
ya'll the Fakest players, cuz your whole crew just 'blowing hot air' like fucking Radiators
grab the gat and Tag yah shirt; watch em get 'pushed around by the metal' like a Bag of dirt
how can you be serious about dissing us ... when ya crew got 7 worthless fags and Murk
you guys are BIG DORKS, and your Tracks are little; can't help but laugh and giggle
like my ass was tickled ...cuz you 'want to sound tough and bring the beef' but you Lack the sizzle
in fact your little, miniture lil wannabes, who seem to be fond of me
lay all eight of you on the road then fucking bomb your street
all yah tracks are soft, plus your songs are weak, again murk i'm a laugh and point at you
thinking your Boys are true ... Then Why i'm i getting pm'd by your members asking if they can Join my crew??? Lmfao





Shits got me bugging out! lol
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Title made me laugh. You probably could've used that in a punchline, though. Rest of it was alright. Nothing as good as your other verse, though.
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Yeah, thought i would through a jab in the title THERE!


Thanks KAu, i'll drop some feed on your shit a bit later when i'm back on!
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haha this was nice. A lot of dope personals. Really liked the closer. Had me rollin' with that one.
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I was born to make you punks cry, so watch these kids get torn and ate like lunch-time
you can't be serious Murk ... with those whack kids in yah crew who can't Formulate a punch-line

Eh some personal, but the punch isn't really hard hitting as much as its stating an opinion... Idk, I didnt like this that much.

show them the door and make them chumps hide; Q's the hardest and Murks Crew's the target
hey murk i got Somrthing to tell, ditch those kids and just put 'punch on the shelf' like a supermarket

Set up was weak. Punchlines and wordplay in the last line was solid.

E-makulate Bitch, we mak-ing Paper, while these weak dudes set out to sway the haters
ya'll the Fakest players, cuz your whole crew just 'blowing hot air' like fucking Radiators

Universal.

grab the gat and Tag yah shirt; watch em get 'pushed around by the metal' like a Bag of dirt
how can you be serious about dissing us ... when ya crew got 7 worthless fags and Murk

See, I can understand how some people might like this bar, but they would be the ones doing audio. You're not doing audio, so you don't see what some of our members are doing in that area. The worthless just doesn't hit with me, leaving your punchline feeling multi forced, honestly.

you guys are BIG DORKS, and your Tracks are little; can't help but laugh and giggle
like my ass was tickled ...cuz you 'want to sound tough and bring the beef' but you Lack the sizzle

Eh, more universal than anything.

in fact your little, miniture lil wannabes, who seem to be fond of me
lay all eight of you on the road then fucking bomb your street

Pointing out you used little in the last bar, then its little with lil the word after the next... Attempting to belittle anyone? Ha. This is universal.

all yah tracks are soft, plus your songs are weak, again murk i'm a laugh and point at you
thinking your Boys are true ... Then Why i'm i getting pm'd by your members asking if they can Join my crew??? Lmfao

Haha right, but not true...

Over all, more universal shit than anything with the punchlines. Some jokes involved, always a good thing, but if they are true, it takes away because it no longer makes them PERSONAL, IMO. I bet you knew that this isn't on your normal level by any means anyway, but you threw out some nice lines. Try harder next time haha :lol:
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well, i'd expect feed like that from you!


so by you nit-picking at every little detail ... i'm going to take this as you thought it was DOPE!!!


thanks for the feed Murk and your honesty ;) !



PS ... the last bar is true, but i ain't a Rat ... so you'll have to figure out which dudes are running around on you.



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Radiators don't blow air, they cool fluid. Just saying. The rest was good though lol

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Shane Ruckus wrote:Radiators don't blow air, they cool fluid. Just saying. The rest was good though lol

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Lol @ take it like I thought it was dope when I broke it down to tell you what I thought.

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lmfao
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This was cool, I've seen better then you though Quix
you might just be playing in this so it was ok
some lines were :o others were just :roll:
but either way you did what you do best....and flowed
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hah thanks Q ppreciate allways your feed!
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I was born to make you punks cry, so watch these kids get torn and ate like lunch-time
you can't be serious Murk ... with those whack kids in yah crew who can't Formulate a punch-line
Haha, another punch fest Quix. Some hit some miss, but as usual, it only takes one or two lines for you to cause mass destruction.
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thanks Riggzy ... you know how we do!
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