Ejaculating Masochists (E-Makulate Metaphorz Diss)

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Ejaculating Masochists (E-Makulate Metaphorz Diss)

Post by IntrinsicCadence »

So I don't even know if Noble and Riggz are really part of E.M., since I haven't seen any evidence, so this is pretty much just aimed at Jack and Quix. This is actually the first text battle verse I've ever written (not including topicals of course).
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E-makulate Metaphorz be lackin' resonant force,
they got me laughin', these has-beens ain't ready for war.
While Collectively Ill be buildin', E.M. just wishes their crew even existed,
but even if it did, these misfits would just spit witless shit listless.
Cuz when these massive egos collide, under the dust is where they'll reside,
we'll leave 'em behind, plunder their thunder and tear asunder their minds.
And while C.I. remains strong like the verbal tusks that we stuck in their spines,
these fools 'll fade fast like the interest other cats have for their played raps and rhymes.
We'll rip these Jack-asses' vertebrae up out their throats and feed 'em to our birds-of-prey,
and before Quix turns to scurry away, them talons will render him inert with furious strength.
Metaphorically C.I. smacks these whack fakes, so E.M.'s best action 'd be to take a new name:
E-Jack-ul8ing Maso-Quix-sts would fit these flaccid kids better than the clean metas they claim.
Jack off-sets his whack writtens that lack diversity by pumpin' out nothin' but battle renditions,
his verses be gritty but ain't got no vision, they be trapped in a far from vast mental prison.
And Quix 'll be nixed by his own egotistic spit that ain't sayin' shit beyond fuck this damn nitwit,
so he best to just tuck in his chin and look down to the grit, cuz his grime ain't a bit e-makulate.

-- Thu Jan 20, 2011 1:11 am --

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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/quck- ... ml#p161549
http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/graci ... ml#p161548
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def wasn't the hardest hitting .. you had some cool concepts in there tho. Just weren't worded as effectivly as you could have.



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I always wanted to see an IC style battle verse! Good shit, man. Had a few nice personals in there and of course your trademark vocab.
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

While I can say that you didnt really come on the punchline side of things, though you did have some mixed in there, and I liked them, I think people forget you are usually writing to record, and had this been something recorded, I really feel this wouldve been a great diss piece. You brought your thing here. I liked the vocab, some imagery, some personal shots fired, everything mixed in well. Good job on your first battle-type verse Cadence! C.I.!
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nothin' hard hitting as punches but decent drop.
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Appreciate the feed fellas. I'd agree with you all that the punches are usually pretty weak, purposefully haven't really gained experience in that particular area of writting and emceeing, but maybe, just maybe, I'll undertake an occasional text battle to change that a bit.
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Post by Riggz »

Liked the fact that you still exhibit vocabulary even in battle raps I.C. however, it's not very hard hitting but makes for an intelligent battle verse. Not hard enough to go with the rest of them, but I liked the fact that you represented in your own style.
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