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eMCee Havic
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my mind is corrupted cynical angers an abrupt shift
sometimes my mentals like a rat trapt inside a bucket
i want to say fuck this but its like fighting gravity
lives a living tragedy a comedy with irrational rationing
im drastically past imagining that i'm placing in the rat race
out of the circuit past last place fallin wit a fast pace
thoughts leave a bad taste like a rotten piece of meat
but i'm hoping that at least a piece isnt diseased an bleak
i'm needing peace but my minds constantly in war an conflict
born from thorns so i'm stuck perpetually doing the wrong shit
i try not to lie i promise but i'm lacking a fuckin conscience
corrupted an obnoxious im right but in a wrong sense
i bomb scripts penned with blood from shredded finger tips
from crawling out of darkness an rippin at the stingers tips
my demeanors pissed like a bull at a show in mexico
doctors prescribe me lexapro for anger and depression woes
but i question those that consider themselves professionals
like they know what really goes on in my mental basket case
while i'm masking hate i put my life on hold to procrastinate
and this that place that my mind often wanders to
fucking corrupted hating justice cause its the one that ponders you

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damn bro! halfway through i was gonna critique my fav bars, then bam. multies of the hook, imagry, personalty, emotion, its all here dawg. i cant pick a favorite line bro. this is hot. thanx for dropping bro. keep it up.
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Shit this was sick as fuck man cant say anything bad about this

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this right here is as dope as it gets
pretty tight s#it right here man.
Two thumbs up! Keep it up man!
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"i'm needing peace but my minds constantly in war an conflict
born from thorns so i'm stuck perpetually doing the wrong shit"

"i bomb scripts penned with blood from shredded finger tips
from crawling out of darkness an rippin at the stingers tips"


This was ill Havoc, damn. The flow is on point, the content is personal and interesting. The two lines I quoted above 'd be the ones that stood out the most to me, but there were def a lot of hot bars in here. The only line I wasn't feelin as much was the "my demeanor's pissed like a bull at a show in mexico", feels like it's worded a little strange. Otherwise though, this is real solid, helluva good read...
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that shit was ill im surprised im jus now reading it. look forward to seeing more drops from you

-- Mon Dec 27, 2010 9:18 pm --

i try not to lie i promise but i'm lacking a fuckin conscience
corrupted an obnoxious im right but in a wrong sense
i bomb scripts penned with blood from shredded finger tips
from crawling out of darkness an rippin at the stingers tips

favorite lines^
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