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I dig the opening line bro. R.I.P Eydea..... the rest i fealt was solid. nice flow. sorta poetic even

*And how you ever gonna get to know the real me
If I filter what I'm sayin cause I'm tryna sound filthy
Dope sir...... much love
*Good music? We wanna see famous faces
If this is adolescence, we've extended its stages
Go on Youtube and act like a racist
But not before updating our Facebook pages!
Also dope. i love how you seem to be hitting society in the jaw.

Much love dawg. i like this alot. nice drop
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This is the first drop I peep from you, and I gotta say it was a tight one. I like the personal aspect of it. I like the closing line because I always feel like, no matter what, I can put on my headphones and breeze thru the rest of the day. Not because I'm dealing with anything serious, but just cuz I can. Anyways, solid piece, looking forward to more drops.

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Good stuff.

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Alright, I can feel this piece. I appreciate the Macklemore name drop since I just discovered him a couple weeks ago and have been listening to his shit non-stop since then. The flow of this is nice, although I think it'd be a lot better in an audio format with the right kinda rhythm and beat accompanying it. The content has some real good bars and some that could be improved. I felt like it started to loose a bit of steam gradually as it went along though. But if the energy built up with the audio delivery style I think that wouldn't be so much of a concern.
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