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This shit is straight ill. Can't believe this got slept on. Great rhyme schemes, the vocab was excellent, used some word combinations I never would have thought of. Good metas, the flow was on it, whole drop is solid. It got a little less impressive in the middle but the rhyme schemes kept my interest. Hell of a debut on the site. Pretty sad this got overlooked.

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Nice ass drop...flow didn't really fall off for me. Liked the rhyme scheme. The whole piece kept me entertained. 9/10. I don't leave a lot of feedback here in the written section but I always enjoy reading ya drops homie...good shit.

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Can't believe this one got slept on. Glad your initial drop without feedback didn't convince you to not get more involved with Illest. The flow on this is crazy, I mean fuckin' crazy, in the best possible way. Never fell off, and how you managed to keep in one basic rhyme scheme from the beginning to the end in a fairly long written, while still having dope content, makes this piece one of the best I've read from you or anyone else. However, there are a couple places where I feel the content is sacrificed a bit for the sake of the flow, but because the flow is so on point I can't complain much about that cuz it's still an ill read even at those points. I'd give this like a 9.7/10...
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This shit was dope, probably got slept on due to the length, lyrically wise there's not much to sleep on, multies and rhymescheme was on point, only complaint I can fathom is a few stretched bars that wouldnt flow over a beat, but I guess some cats just write for text, in any case this shit was dope.
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This rhyme is so ill after reading it I threw up on myself:)
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This was a nice piece man, the flow was tight
the word usage was the key factor in this
alongside the truths which really shine in here
very nice work my dude...keep writing!
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Post by Grim »

sick multies, sick scheme, great vocab...awesome drop
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