***THE LIGHT BRINGER***

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***THE LIGHT BRINGER***

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(Intro)
That which can be asserted without proof
Can be dismissed without proof
But it is proof that denies faith
and without faith, there are no Gods


(Verse)
Dare to walk free, you're never chained to the lines
don't go missin in the fiction of a plagiarist scribe
the founding fathers of our country had atheist minds
ignorance is bliss and right where conspiracy thrives
peer through my eyes, don't be blind to all the lessons
If God was perfect he couldn't spawn our imperfections
Create a finite mess till the dawn of Armageddon
The slaughter of the lambs with an army drawn from Heaven
Yeah I said it just to get you mad and it worked
Half ass Christians, probably never sat in a church
Haven't learned you're just as atheist as I
But to the naked eye it's just not as plain and dry
Say goodbye to parading with your fake faith
When your own God smites you in his vain grace
I take aim at the false and the holy
But I repeat my myself, if there's a God just show me



(Chorus x2)
Not a religious man, never felt the hands of God
The bible molded you, me, I'll never bear facades
Follow your golden rule, me, I'll never spare the rod
Do what you're told to do or go into the Land Of Nod


(Verse)
Fuck someone with the nerve to judge me
but when push comes to shove, no urge to budge me
See the world gets ugly, we're responsible for that
But we...paint it pretty, ig-norant to the facts
We can't grasp the smoke that is reality
Our hands clasped and hope remains shackle free
The one eyed man keeps watch over his pasture
The lambs graze but they starve under their master
This isn't rapture, Megiddo's just a scare tactic
We create hell so we can appear average
We're savage, we kill, we maim, and we rape
Rehabilitate, you should be burnt on the stake
Eye for an eye, leaving both of us blind
Equality at this time, is nothing but a sick lie
We decide the grass is greener on the other side
When we stand in a wasteland with stormy skies
Thunder cries on deaf ears, we look away
As the world burns we only see a sunny day


(Chorus x2)
Not a religious man, never felt the hands of God
The bible molded you, me, I'll never bear facades
Follow your golden rule, me, I'll never spare the rod
Do what you're told to do or go into the Land Of Nod
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Yo, this was nice man.
"Fuck someone with the nerve to judge me
but when push comes to shove, no urge to budge me"

The subject was just real. You believe what you believe and you expressed it clearly. Well thought out joint here. Really felt the 2nd verse.

Nice dude.
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Shit man, this is great. I had idea's to do a track just like this. Looks like you beat me to it. Chorus was perfect. Really, I have nothing to critique. Beat goes along nicely with this, too.
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wow. this is raw bro. i can relate to this on many levels. nice form. clean bro. clean. great read. thanx.

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the founding fathers of our country had atheist minds
ignorance is bliss and right where conspiracy thrives

Best Line Of Verse One.

Second verse I can't say...

i'll say first verse was more solid with flow,
while second verse went here but the lyrics were better.
thats how it should be, First .. Second, so makes sense

I Like where you went, Cool piece, Keep it up
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This joint was ill, as an Atheist myself the concept was easily relatable, religious vocab was on point as well as conveying your points clearly while still making it lyrical, no complaints, dope shit.

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Good written.

As long as you're the peace_maker on Trshady.

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didnt know pastor mase was still into rapping....

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Basement God wrote:didnt know pastor mase was still into rapping....

This shit is about dismissing religion, you incomprehensive dipshit, don't bother responding to shit that's over your lil' peebrain head, you look stupid.

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complexity wrote:Good written.

As long as you're the peace_maker on Trshady.
Who are you on TR? You can't even see that section unless your signed up. As you can see this as been reworked and added to since those 2 separate drops so it's obvious this isn't bitten.

-- Fri Nov 26, 2010 5:05 pm --
Phasewon wrote:
Basement God wrote:didnt know pastor mase was still into rapping....

This shit is about dismissing religion, you incomprehensive dipshit, don't bother responding to shit that's over your lil' peebrain head, you look stupid.
Not really dismissing. Just showing my own opinion on it and crucifying (lol) all those who say they are Christian but are even less religious than me.
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