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This cracker has lost it, wrap you wack rappers in gauzes/
I'm a disaster, i'll kill you by natural causes/
The master of rawness, you faggots have it all backwards/
Give me the cold shoulder and you'll leave with yer clavicle fractured/
Its factual, yer a saltine, I'm an animal cracker/
Panic'll mask the pain when this cannibal captures/
Yer favorite rapper, oh the horror, i'll go to war with ants/
No Bull-shit, i'll be horace grant over jordan who ignores his fans/
Grab the torch and lamps, shed light on a dark exhibit/
Narcissistic, yes my heart is part acidic/
Part stone, watch the sparks as my art is sharpened with it/
Stopped on the road to success and was charged with parking tickets/
Who's starting shit with the clark kent of script enlightenment/
Barge in, dippin mics in cartons of liquid nitrogen/
Hardened to sticks of ice and then shattered with half a rhyme/
Doesn't matter if cats decline the fact I'm a mastermind/

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Ruckus wrote:This cracker has lost it, wrap you wack rappers in gauzes/
I'm a disaster, i'll kill you by natural causes/
The master of rawness, you faggots have it all backwards/
Give me the cold shoulder and you'll leave with yer clavicle fractured/

No Bull-shit, i'll be horace grant over jordan who ignores his fans/
Happy belated vet day there soilder boy.

Not sure why dudes is sleepin on this but maybe I'll catch up later to why that is.

Way to rip into em Ruckus.
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Give me the cold shoulder and you'll leave with yer clavicle fractured/
^^oo I like the View! idea n all- and I've always liked using the word Clavicle
Stopped on the road to success and was charged with parking tickets/
kool..

^^These two lines were proper man!! - apart from that it was just there chillin, like a call out to me, I read it cause I realized its a diss (well I hoping it would be =) )

iight!! man!!
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No just a series I'm starting. A verse a day, named in sequence with the phonetic alphabet I.e. alpha bravo charlie delta etc. so look out for tomorrows verse

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Good word play and flow as always bro... nice multies and such... i just dont get the Horace Grant Line... All I Remember was Him Bitching ABout Getting A Better Contract Once The Bulls Gave Pippen The Nod... But Other Than That The Whole Verse Was Fiyah
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I was really digging the inner rhymes in this. Def helped keep that flow going smooth. Some nice punchlines as well.

This stood out to me:
Part stone, watch the sparks as my art is sharpened with it/
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Grab the torch and lamps, shed light on a dark exhibit/
Narcissistic, yes my heart is part acidic/
Part stone, watch the sparks as my art is sharpened with it/
Stopped on the road to success and was charged with parking tickets/
Who's starting shit with the clark kent of script enlightenment/
Barge in, dippin mics in cartons of liquid nitrogen/

Those lines stood out to me as the best part, although the beginning and closers were nice as well. My only complaint is that I didn't get the horace grant line either but that's less a criticism on how it's written and more just a comment on specific content. However it doesn't take away from the illness of the entire thing.
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the horace grant line basically means that I'd rather be a lesser known dude than an egotistical asshole who's talent went to his head. Respect > fame

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This is super ill. that parking ticket line is the shit bro. great read!
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Ah, now this drop was refreshing. This joint was dope all the way through. The multis were ill, punches had umph and your wording was tight (everything flowed well and each thought emptied into the next)

Fave lines:
The master of rawness, you faggots have it all backwards/
Give me the cold shoulder and you'll leave with yer clavicle fractured/
Its factual, yer a saltine, I'm an animal cracker/
^^^That was the most disgusting part of the piece lol

Narcissistic, yes my heart is part acidic/
Part stone, watch the sparks as my art is sharpened with it/
Stopped on the road to success and was charged with parking tickets/
^^^Good imagery here

This was ill. I'ma look out for your work.
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"Grab the torch and lamps, shed light on a dark exhibit/
Narcissistic, yes my heart is part acidic/
Part stone, watch the sparks as my art is sharpened with it/
Stopped on the road to success and was charged with parking tickets/
Who's starting shit with the clark kent of script enlightenment/
Barge in, dippin mics in cartons of liquid nitrogen/"

^^ill shit. the flow was crazy, punches was effective, the last line could've been more hard-hittin' to end with, but overall this shit was on point.

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