can i borrow a dolla?

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Gutta
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can i borrow a dolla?

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Catch me relapsing in a re-laxed fashion shit
Don’t wanna catch a fuckin acid flashback from it
An ass backwards addict with a hand that’s fisted
Fixin to plan on twistin government scams and systems
Unseen in camera candid pictures written as if
I hadn’t a single hand to script this
I just need a standard sentence and a pad to sketch
My bad intentions, feelin like a crack injection
Never had an intervention or an inner connection
Or even a little direction
Im really just syllable sketchin
Without a flow and words in order
I start to form a firm disorder
Twitchin like a conserta snorter
Why u think I just live on this corner wont ya gimme a quarter?
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
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Re: can i borrow a dolla?

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This actually sounds like it should be a audio...
the flow is on point, and some of the lines just came off nicely
you did your thing with this, but I really think it should be audio
and yes...you gotta a quarter bro.....and he fed you...


see what I did there 8-)
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