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-- Sat Oct 23, 2010 8:44 am --
-- Sat Oct 23, 2010 8:44 am --LMNO P (El p) wrote:Due Friday *but you already have your verse done*
No flipping, b/s hate votes, explained votes only *pref. break downs*
Limit was 20 lines
Ok George of the jungle lets go...
What you WRITE IS GARBAGE I SMITE MY TARGETS, IGNITE HIS CARCAS im a PYRO ARSON!...
MY-FLOWS AWESOME, So any "EYEDEAS" of Beating Me is "DEAD" WRONG...like "MICHALE ARSEN"!...
I LIKE THE CARNAGE, but ya rhymes LACKING IN RELEVANCE of PRACTICAL ELEMENTS for RAPPING INTELLIGENT...
So if your "RAPS A DEVELOPMENT" then youre just a "Pre Teen with A CUPS" who still "LACKS IN DEVELOPING"!!!...
Get SMACKED FOR THE HELL OF IT! Youre WACK, I BEEN TELLING HIM, so let me BREAK THIS VIRGIN IN...
Ill RAPE AND MURDER HIM, got fuckin Ripped by Noble, proving he couldnt MAKE A VERSE TO WIN!...
An Ya RAPPING IS FEEBLE act "Big Headed" so im SMASHING HIS EGO, Enemy is NOT A CHALLENGE!...
Put it this way, if ENEMY is the AXIS OF EVIL then you already been KNOCKED OFF BALANCE!...-8
Ill Squeeze em Dry and not one DROP OF TALENT, I Murk Dudes Quick when I BUST RAPS AT DUMB FAGS...
Get personal? Ya rhymes Suck Ass..you lookin likea Burnt Tooth Pick or a STRUCK MATCH SLASH MUSKRAT!...-10
And your raps Suck In a Way that makes him a Fucking Disgrace, i want to smack him till BLOWS CRUSH IN HIS FACE...
This ugly Fuckers Ashamed to post his Pics on the Page, So im taking "E OUT" like he WROTE "THA" IN HIS NAME...
WAIT, he has 1 shitty pic on display, id hate to BE THIS FUCKIN FAG or dream that i had to SEE HIS UGLY ASS!...
Indeed He Sucks At Rap, and if it wasnt for this bitches Ear Rings i wouldnt have SEEN HIS UPPER HALF!...
(thats his left ear)
In battles my ENERGIES PRESENT ill STEADILY WRECK HIM when i SMASH THIS VET AND CRACK HIS CHEST...
aka Eddy Bling ? nah this fucker looks like EDDY FROM TEKKEN... thats JACKED ON EX AND CRACK AND METH!... 16
Or Better yet you look like Eazy E...infected with HIV and STDs, and has been dead for the PAST THREE WEEKS!...
Ill Crack ya Teeth you Lack Real Heat.. lookin like hes Made of Wire thats Stayed on Fire from gallons of GASOLINE!...18
Stop tryin to RAP LIKE ME, i Disfigure Stick Figures, Enemy throwing punchs? Hed STRUGGLE WITH A PACK OF NUTS!...
You a SUBLTE AND PASSIVE THUG, Acting Tough please only thing Enemy "Drives By On" is Zebras in the JUNGLES OF AFRICA!!!...
this is "THA ENEMY"
THA ENEMY wrote:......lol.........bugz bunny......ezy bro
I GOT THIS.........
honestly..u BET THIS VET IS SKILLFULL...claimin he's fly..watch me GET HIS FEATHERS REMOVED
deja vu!...bout to repeat history on sc wen i LET THESE METAS KILL U...
flexin pirate weapons..POLISHED PERFECT KNIVES,SLINGS AND RIFLES.
.i,m ‘excellin in rap’ ‘but EL wouldnt have’ *SOLID VERSES* ICING A BIBLE...
ma ‘cypher spits’ make a ‘writer quit’..like this BATTLE’S HARSH OUTCOME....
En’ll rip em bullet holes nd watch *El p leak* like SABOTAGED ALBUMS...
..u utter insignificance,..ya FLOW IS WHERE VANITY LIES...
...this broke ass wit no class..borrows *nobe’s clothes* to SHOW THEY SHARE ‘FAMILY TIES’...
.i 'relay sick thots' n 'relate wit gods'..yesss!..i WILL STOMP ANY SOUL.
..his follow up lines are weak..cos the *set ups are foiled* like FAILED PUNK’D EPISODES....
....off the top flow.check....i DEMOLISH WIT MA HARD DROPS..
.u?..ur *frees* are hardly ACKNOWLEDGED LIKE UNARMED COPS..
..(just give up)..tryna STAND TO RETURN A BLOW?..i doubt that PLAN IS DISCERNIBLE..
..cos EL couldnt *give a scratch* with HANDS ON A TURNTABLE.....
i SLANG AND I BURN YAYO......ROLLIN WEED,SELLIN BONGG...
..the fact’s..u *cant make punches*..ROTARY TELEPHONES....(oh..).
yo i gotta ask... why’d u vote urself for the personal SPACE WHEN...
all ya *personals is false* like undercover AGENTS?...
.’fuck it’..’duck quick’..i’m aimin WIT TWO BARRELS AT EM..
..C4 strapped *to split LMN in bits* to PRODUCE SEVERAL ATOMS......
WHATTTTTTTT!
disclaimers:....voted himself in the personals category in the hall of fame....LMN(element)....lost to meta4ik
ENEMY!
