Hate Me

Drop your written rhymes in one of the largest collections of original rhymes on the internet. The feedback in our Written Rhymes section will simply amaze you.

Moderators: Loon E Lou, Enlightend

Post Reply
User avatar
MC Believe
Novice
Offline
Posts: 61
Joined: Sun Aug 01, 2010 2:10 am
Location: Pomona California

Hate Me

Post by MC Believe »

Im Hated like a Laker Fan Inside Boston/
Champ they Lost-In,Flip Tricks Like Eric Koston/
Love Kobe but I save The Game Like D.Fisher/
MC Disser,My shot & blunt Both were Swisher/
Out for Blood Twilight Bitch Its Crimson/
A Fuck U Mission,Talking shit Like Mel Gibson/
Weak Minds Hate Me like Nazi's Hate Obama/
But Not as Much as New York Hates Osama/
I go Beyond Drama,& Fuck Yo Momma,so Hate Me/
Science Made me,like Wolverienes bones u cant Break Me/
And I do Drugs, Like Back When Steve-O Did/
Flip Out Shoot Slugs,Like a Columbine Kid/
Im Hated Like the Dentist, Death or DMV Lines/
Like a Prison Sentence, Cops Or Landmines/
Santeria I stay Sublime,Half court shot in Overtime/
Some waste Thier Time,To Blindliy hate my Rhymes/
Image
User avatar
complexity
Elevated
Offline
Posts: 9689
Joined: Mon Jan 02, 2006 9:09 am
Wins: 48
Losses: 15
Location: Maine
Contact:

Re: Hate Me

Post by complexity »

MC Believe wrote:Im Hated like a Laker Fan Inside Boston/
Champ they Lost-In,Flip Tricks Like Eric Koston/
Love Kobe but I save The Game Like D.Fisher/
MC Disser,My shot & blunt Both were Swisher/
Out for Blood Twilight Bitch Its Crimson/
A Fuck U Mission,Talking shit Like Mel Gibson/
Weak Minds Hate Me like Nazi's Hate Obama/
But Not as Much as New York Hates Osama/
I go Beyond Drama,& Fuck Yo Momma,so Hate Me/
Science Made me,like Wolverienes bones u cant Break Me/
And I do Drugs, Like Back When Steve-O Did/
Flip Out Shoot Slugs,Like a Columbine Kid/
Im Hated Like the Dentist, Death or DMV Lines/
Like a Prison Sentence, Cops Or Landmines/
Santeria I stay Sublime,Half court shot in Overtime/
Some waste Thier Time,To Blindliy hate my Rhymes/
Straight.

The dude who saved that game was Ron Artest. I can't believe I even have to say that.
MC Believe wrote:Im Hated like a Laker Fan Inside Boston/
Champ they Lost-In,Flip Tricks Like Eric Koston/
Love Kobe but I save The Game Like D.Fisher/
MC Disser,My shot & blunt Both were Swisher/
Out for Blood Twilight Bitch Its Crimson/
A Fuck U Mission,Talking shit Like Mel Gibson/
Weak Minds Hate Me like Nazi's Hate Obama/
But Not as Much as New York Hates Osama/


The whole piece could have been more elaborate. Other then that, the flow was a bit unorthodox and it was entertaining.

Good references.
Image

Check out our Vapes for great prices.
User avatar
MC Believe
Novice
Offline
Posts: 61
Joined: Sun Aug 01, 2010 2:10 am
Location: Pomona California

Re: Hate Me

Post by MC Believe »

its debatable who saved that game artest possibly i say fisher cuz after we got in the lead with that three boston never recovered

appreciate the feedback though
Image
User avatar
complexity
Elevated
Offline
Posts: 9689
Joined: Mon Jan 02, 2006 9:09 am
Wins: 48
Losses: 15
Location: Maine
Contact:

Re: Hate Me

Post by complexity »

MC Believe wrote:its debatable who saved that game artest possibly i say fisher cuz after we got in the lead with that three boston never recovered

appreciate the feedback though
I'm trying not to remember. Artest did a lot going down the stretch.
Image

Check out our Vapes for great prices.
User avatar
Munteskue_lol
Elite Freestyler
Offline
Posts: 305
Joined: Fri Apr 23, 2010 3:05 pm
Wins: 4
Losses: 5

00909

Post by Munteskue_lol »

09009
Last edited by Munteskue_lol on Wed Dec 15, 2010 4:59 am, edited 1 time in total.
User avatar
NoVeL
Rap Assassin
Offline
Posts: 737
Joined: Sat Apr 04, 2009 12:29 pm
Wins: 14
Losses: 28
No Shows: 10000

Re: Hate Me

Post by NoVeL »

Who cares About Who Saved The Lakers.. Point is Boston Didn't Win, They Got Cheated smh
User avatar
Munteskue_lol
Elite Freestyler
Offline
Posts: 305
Joined: Fri Apr 23, 2010 3:05 pm
Wins: 4
Losses: 5

..

Post by Munteskue_lol »

..
Last edited by Munteskue_lol on Wed Dec 15, 2010 5:00 am, edited 1 time in total.
User avatar
Kuhlerblynd
But I See Right Thru You
Offline
Posts: 2724
Joined: Tue Aug 17, 2010 8:04 pm
Wins: 43
Losses: 8
No Shows: 2

Re: Hate Me

Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Nice is the first thing that came to mind when I was finished with this. You had some really ill ines in there, then here and there filler came out and took away from it. At first I liked where you were going with the Laker shit and how you were flipping that also. Definitely a great way to start a piece and grab some attention. Good job bro. Ill be keeping an eye out for more in the future.
--~Murk McNasty~--
Battle WRECKord 42-8
Image
User avatar
Phasewon
Rhyme Master
Offline
Posts: 213
Joined: Mon Feb 02, 2009 2:06 pm
Wins: 0
Losses: 0
Location: Seattle, WA
Contact:

Re: Hate Me

Post by Phasewon »

ehh, shit was decent, seems like this was just some shit you wrote in 10 minutes, the rhymes and overall structure were simplistic, although the flow was ill and you actually made relevant points in the rhymes, stay improving.
User avatar
Munteskue1
Novice
Offline
Posts: 52
Joined: Wed Jun 30, 2010 11:00 am
Losses: 1

Re: Hate Me

Post by Munteskue1 »

Agree with Phasewon 100 %
Post Reply

Return to “Written Rhymes”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 3 guests