3 keystyles i did this morning

[mint condition]

(this is the morning warmup)
.. my homies a sabertoothe/
the danger soothes him like a baby sucking breastmilk from a ladies boob/
aint we aint gotta talk about the way i move/
these fools is crazy dudes thinking they gon make it through/
i got a larger arsonal than the navy do aimed at you/
seein red like the sun settin. but im strait up like it angle at noon/
now ima start gettin hot like the last days of june/
flows tighter than painted on bathing suits/
or virgin amatuer anal shoots//
fuckin raisin the roof/ startin moshpits/
taking bud coors and miller hostage/
tellem start sayin the truth/
we dont like tasteless yellow beer, start raisin the proof/
100 billion ads and campaigns/ its all fake like the news/
never swayed by these mut-ants/
this non human de-evolution movement got me stayin recluse///

(gettin hotter..)

i just cut my hours down at work to two days a week/
i need more freetime to write shit<and blaze these MCs/
causin earthquakes over beats/ hittin so hard
it causes peoples knees to get weak clear overseas//
just a greedy mafucka tryna pollinate like honey bees/
so after i bust n skeet its on to the next lovely treat/
and i could puff some treez/ it makes me eco friendly
but in actuality the only thing that keeps me from turning green//(whoa)
know what i mean?/ im talkin the hulk u fuckin idiots/
so christ-like on the mic i could make u switch religions bitch//
jesus resurrected a second time just to witness this/
his desciples came with../
..to script this new edition according to these writtens that i spit//
so fuck the catholics and christians/
im rewriting the history..
of the biggest gimmick religion that ever existed!!//

( ok im warm now )

freeze bitches/ im like sea bisquit/
do laps so fast around ya tracks u gettin sea sickness//
spittin heat if u feel frigid/
flows hotter than a 100 keys gettin moved out of a police district/
cops pissed cuz there D's missin//
snakes in the grass/ u always hear these streets hissin/
thats/ the reason i live on an island/ to keep the peace pimpin//
but even if my knees give in../
ima keep be-lievin in hip hop. thats reason enuff for me to keep livin/
if tho the world keep sp;innin and people keep sinnin/
ima never take this game too serious. like a team scrimmage/
tho i always aim to keep winnin, my mission/
in life is to teach. spread peace love and forgiveness/
even tho i got beef with these christians that keep preachin religion/
im gonna teach em a lesson, make em rethink their decisions/
beat em and whip em/ leavin evil inscriptions/
with a demons intentions/
i leave em leakin while they reach for the heavens//
in less than 33 seconds freed and released from conviction/
its byrdman the mormon, my mission's
to kill conformists and snitches/

feedback appreciated i havent been writing in years just started again..

[eMCee Havic]

these were alright pretty simple good mutis in places others were almost hittin, no real stand out lines

liked the first key flowed the best

i would like to see more,

keep elevating

[mint condition]

thanks bro i feel ya. just tryna get back in the game. im fiendin to drop some shit on the mic< so expect more.

[QwarterZ]

These were purdy cool, need some work
the structure made me not want to read it
but I did, you got some decent lines my dude
the flow could be tweaked a bit, other then that
it seemed that you did what you aimed to do here
warming yourself up, I see some potential from you man
keep writing and you'll be dropping some sick schemes
punches and so on, keep doing you bruh....peace

[mint condition]

ive always had trouble with my structure. not always< but when i use a lot of multies and emphasis on certain words/schemes it makes it more difficult. appreciate the feedback.