Getting Through you was easy and your Whole Crew Quenched my Quest,Your Dogs Upset cause they Couldn't Harm this Vet/
Put you to Rest when i come to your Sector, Turn you into a Specter when i Blast it,Leave you Rotting and Bodied in a Casket/
you Knockin on Deaths Door, my Rhyme Styles Hardcore,Thwart your Plans and Contort your Hands,i'm the War Lord of this Blood Sport/
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Blood Sport
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Blood Sport
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Re: Blood Sport
This was....ok. It flowed alright but it was like you were reaching to make it long, but it just didn"t work out for you. You do however show potential as a writer and i just think you could do a lot better. If you're going to end something with "i'm the war lord of this", it best be phenominal. This just wasn't. Keep droppin though i'd definitely like to see more.
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