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Jesodist
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Post by Jesodist »

Iv got good rhyme sense, I avoid the dissonance
Now Its time I tried my luck with someone with
expierience and honest.
I dont have fuckin respect for you And your wins too
But a brothas gotta do what a brothas gotta do
For my reign in spotlight is extatically overdue
After I finish this I expect some literary review from
you you know who i am talking too. i am miles above your
level fool get that clear in your head wipe the drool.
Here begins my journey to escalate to the next plateau
So without further adue, lets get this party started
you douch.
Iv grown up under roofs in a plethora of places
Introduced to all kinds of playa's and there faces
Got myself into all kinds of trouble and tight spaces
Give or take a couple things theres nothing that
replaces A kind of functionality a family embraces
So as I'm out, kickin it and tryin to run bases
I know theres no one worried bout me and how my lifes a
wastin'

You people dont realize how lucky that you really are
To you my view of family will be interpretted as
bizarre, Its emotional toll equals that of a freight car
To take my mind off it I must place my dreams off afar
Like to one day become a big bright glistening golden
star, Where you came from doesnt matter, its all about who
you are Im here to rise higher boy, and thats straight from the
heart

My past dictates my future which dictates my way of
life I always reminice this as I go towards my huntin knife
My distaste for where Im heading just dont mean squat
Cause boy, in my neighborhood I be killin or I be shot


As my strategy changes, I hope my credibility will take
a sprout Iv seen the competition, iv taken a little scout
Winning is winning, and if theres one thing that im
knowledgeable about Its sizing up my competition and knowing
without a doubt i know i am better than most of you clowns
you all know who you are but you are all going down.
dissing me in forrums and my battles but you aint full grown
i will ignore your bitchasses from now on.

Cats i've assaulted, call me the high exalted
hating on me your luck is now salted,
lyrical terrorist, their cleverest nemesis,
I'll forever diss these cats split their pelvises, it's effortless
Sever their wrist, with this disc on the premises,
I am the sickest bitch so remember this.
Journalists said there's none better, You weak creeps read it
and weep like love letters believe I achieve to sever any competitor,
Fly on the worst of weather Crashing your skeletal vertical and symmetrical
The only reason your sick is cause you need a medical!
To your health Detrimental I am disgusted in battle by R.A.I. AND TRETRU
who get all personal and sentimental With Soft traits as a petal
They prolly need a stick straight up in their rectal.

Propz to you QUIX This is just what I needed
A free win to get my life a little bit more heated
3 one i was winning but wildbill hating on me and my battle got deleted
I saw I had a challenge, but I look and instead
I see a free thinking nigga whos in way over his head
Whats on your cheek nigga is that a tear you shed?
Naw im mistaken It has the colour red
Looks like these blows im givin startin to leave some bloodshed
See pal, thinks its best that you just go to bed
Its kinda sad you gonna go through life bein unwed
Not your fault when you were young yo mama kept you
overfed Obesities a challenge that will one day leave yo bitch
ass dead.

As I be chillin thinkin, reminicin from within
Taken shots of gin wanting to lyrically keep killin
Watchin TRETRU tryin to make your career begin
May as well not start, throw it in the trash been
Nigga you got no talent, youl never be a has been
Rapper of solace bringin malice, smashin ya palace
spit madness leave you lost in and ripped in the darkness
Make drowning n sink in sadness You worthless faggot
you cant hack it Battle rapping? You didn't learn it
I keep hurting Piss on your name shit on it and burn it!


I come from the North, I did ya man a favor by writin his words
When he didn't have the money that my writin' is worth, Born with the satanic curse, Full their mouth with acid till they choke, and their throat hurts till their esophagus 'burst, Fuck with J, you go right in a hearse When you mention dope cats, Jesodist always is first Cuz I keep spittin heat, till i'm dyin of thirst While you try rehearse, you lyrically getting loose fuck, you better tighten your verse Devil labels try to sign me at birth Just knowin' we could be the finest rhymers on Earth.

Iv been around snooping Looking for my next award
I turn to you and see a twin I now begin to dash toward
This battle, can't wait for it to begin Because inside me, I have stored
A cutting board, Dart board, Medival sword, All pointing toward
The inevitable death of yours. Here comes the second
SLICE, PIERCE, and SLASH In your winning and little lost record
You hold left of your chest broken and dismembered.

Here we go, Have you transfixed in my sight
Prepare yourself homie We both know iv begun a fight
Tonight, Im not trying to be polite If its alright,
Im just here to recite Words that might ignite
And burn you from the inside out tonight Words that if I recite right
Will send you in flight Tuck you in, goodnight
Dont look in the closet or under the bed
Or you just might Recieve an unexpected FRIGHT tonight!

i rather leave this site puzzled instead
SCOTTJAMES Go get your muzzle of the shelf Put it on yourself
We all know your bark is bigger then your bite you lil elf.

This is gonna put you in a slump, Gonna be a bit fat slap
Cause one thing I knows is that White men can't jump
And SCOTTJAMES can't rap.

Although my rhymes have their way to infect Souls,
worry not your resurrect Just give it time,
You will heal, Dont look past that Or too much into me
Im not a murder suspect Although sometimes Im known to show
Willful neglect With the subjects of my rhymes
They are known to dissect objects

think u got the site lifted, i bring the collapse
painfully readin' yo raps, got my eyes doin' laps
carrots shuved in his ass thats why he use caps
stopped crushin' u busta's but i had to relapse
You aint shit i had to throw the point accross
forfeit, cuz a battle is just a set up for a loss
fuck a king, fuck a lord, cuz i am the boss
pesants step up n holla at me killin' you emcees on my killin' spree
if u wanna call it that raps strike with a force, BRAAAT, BRAAT, Splat
one-on-one lyrical combat what u wanna say to that

Today that object is you The big teeth of theres
May chew you Till your goo But you'll solidify and be as good as new
So stay coo, but SCOTTJAMES Must Respect And the rest For now
your probably the best around.


But their begging doesn't matter to me, I'm allergic to wacker rappers, and automaticaly sneeze, lyrically supreme being make your brain freeze reading my frees So when they rap after me, I try not to breathe caz what the devil perceives is what my mind conceals, Here to reveal the true meaning of deceive burn you with ease and Rotten your knees.


think u got the site lifted, i bring the collapse
painfully readin' yo raps, got my eyes doin' laps
carrots shuved in his ass thats why he use caps
stopped crushin' u busta's but i had to relapse
You aint shit i had to throw the point accross
forfeit, cuz a battle is just a set up for a loss
fuck a king, fuck a lord, cuz i am the boss
pesants step up n holla at me
killin' you emcees on my killin' spree
if u wanna call it that
raps strike with a force, BRAAAT, BRAAT, Splat
one-on-one lyrical combat
what u wanna say to that

And when the records in the store, you'll be begging
for more Cause you never heard a style like this perfected
before From the surface of the Earth to the center of the
core Epidermis of a girl or placenta of a whore
All the verses in the World couldn't settle the score
strangle you with you necklace Choke you with your own purse
So coarse Of course Cause Jesodist is the master of the deepest metaphors

-"When alone on the hills With the wind in your hair
With a longing to feel Just to be free and you can go everywhere.

-If you know what you want And the timing is right
Would you take what was yours? fuck it i rather watch
you bleed from your pores.

Its not as much a item as a state of wellbeing
Its importance aint diminished, dont be disagreein
Like an aquamarine, Pure serene, inspiration machine
The lack of it is quite obscene Leaves no time to reconvene
whenever you all dissin my cousin i gotta intervene,
he is my family understand and that real you feel?

They call it Freedom Without it No chance, To become
Anything short of an alleghany plum Now, boy Dont get glum
i'll have you tissue looking softer than bubble gum,
i wount brag when i say i pack pipe bombs and guns.
Unless youv already succumb, i wanna see you ina acasket numb.

To the pain and insecurity That comes when wholesome purity
Is torn and your maturity Aint warm, dont take the word from me.

This might be somethin you gotta do own your own
QUIT DICK RIDING!!Go ahead venture to the unknown,
Just know Il hear you groan, When to yourself youv shown
The inability to postpone The effects of the zone
That leaves you all alone i'll punch a hole in the ozone.



Just a lil Mix
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FULL OF SNITCHES AND BITCHES WHO DICK RIDE IN BUNCHES.

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Post by Time Line »

"think u got the site lifted, i bring the collapse
painfully readin' yo raps, got my eyes doin' laps
carrots shuved in his ass thats why he use caps
stopped crushin' u busta's but i had to relapse
You aint shit i had to throw the point accross
forfeit, cuz a battle is just a set up for a loss"


nice point u got there, u came up specificaly!!
i like the way u handle ur flow , just dividing facts, i aint dickriding or shit but i just wanna know that everyone is reading this so its clear that its some dope verses, i see u came up clean caz u came up with heavy descriptions and u made the scenery clear for any rapper to understand and also get inspired

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Post by Jesodist »

Fuck all the haters that read this.
THIS SITE IS AN EMBARASSMENT
FULL OF SNITCHES AND BITCHES WHO DICK RIDE IN BUNCHES.

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Post by Jesodist »

Damn 45 views and not one single soul smart enough to give me feedback. what a sarcastic name the site has Illest when no one can give an ill verse an ill feedback.
THIS SITE IS AN EMBARASSMENT
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Post by precise »

well i forced myself to read half of it... if u 2 dip-shits werent runnin around the site actin like douchebags the way ya are, than maybe someone would bother trying to read about 60 audiobars worth of lame lyrics with: basic rhymes, a complete lack of punchlines mettaphores or similies, and an extremely commonly used overall topic in order to give u feedback...


lose the attitude, fuckstain
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facin me? its mission impossible, like pickin up lesbian broads
fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage

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Post by Jesodist »

Whatever that means^
THIS SITE IS AN EMBARASSMENT
FULL OF SNITCHES AND BITCHES WHO DICK RIDE IN BUNCHES.

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Post by The Gonz »

It was decent. Parts of it seemed like you were gonna come with something witty but ended up lacking. You've got potential, for sure. Like said above, the rhymes were fairly basic, you could have used a lot more multies. Also, the structure is kinda messed up, you need to seperate the bars and lines better so its easier to read and pick up the flow. I've seen a lot worse on this site, but I've also seen a lot better. Keep elevating.

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Post by Lotus »

I like how you say "jus a lil mix"

after that many verses. same shit as ruckus sayin... could had a lot more goin for it.

I can tell you keystyle most of your shit, so as far as punches, not alot of work you can do on them... jus keep it real, keep it raw, and eventually consistent multies will develop

should prolly put more thought n mental effort into your written verses though.
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Post by Alter Ego »

Wait dont get ur panties in a bunch...

Im just saying is you dont spit enough Bars of Fire...
U lack punchlines... Complex rhymes..

Long Long posts are Risky... most people get 4 bars into a verse and Know if they want to keep reading... if you dont have somethign that makes them keep reading... u get ignored and left no Feed back.


U need something to pull people in... if its a Luda style punch lines..

Or 2pacs ability to story tell or let u feel his emotion..

Nas's Complex style... or Even Like Eminems Shock Value and humor

if i can Relate to what ur saying.. Or i dont find it entertaining its hard for me to want to Keep reading.

I mean... its a freestyle.. but Time is Money.. and ur askin peeps to take on a part time job to Read FIller.
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