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http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/the-r ... 11129.html <------ Nice Post go read it.

Its All random and Choppy and Kinda Long…
Hope u read it all…Its long but short bars for the most Part.



i Wrote this rhyme on paper That Bleed when i tore it...
Peek into my head Explore it... IM Med-Iphoric... meds? my head adores it..
don't bother tellin me ur name... brain cells to dead to store it.
Dont listen to anything i say!!! and fuck what read before this...

I spit a vicious verse.. about a bitches worth....
Tell her she cant sleep... she has to go do the dishes first!
Excuse me.. i need some stitches nurse...
I'm addicted to Pot and Porn but which is worse?
Don't get mad when u find my number in ur Bitches Purse
Love is just a sickness Curse.... I voted for abortion
Even after ive witnessed birth..
I wish A Comet would just hit this earth...
So i would know if Jesus was real or just a fictisous curse

Have you seen my Knife? I was thinkin of takin my life
Figure Once slice to the wrists for each guy datin my wife...
Who do i trust Satan or Christ?
Why are women here????? They were just made to cripple us....
Love is just a disease like aids and syphilis
lifes a joke ...raised by abusive parents why else u think my wife gets choked?
There hasn't been a wife i haven't tried to impale
If the bitch dies fuck it.... i order a new bride in the mail...

cuz Evil joeys a disturbed person
See joey runnin through the hospital Naked absurd cursin
...still flritin with the nurses
Joey has YOU WONDERIN WHY he talks in 3rd person In his verses
Yea This Kid is Sick
I can hvae you Hit and Kicked by Six Spic Kids with sticks
Ill Dress you like a pinyata and leave u in a Mexican festival
ill call Martha Stewart and have u molested with vegetables.
UR fucking with a dyslectic extra terrestrial

Lifes too serious but my rap is not....
i got a style crazier than that woman astronaut
I spit shit hopin u laugh alot..
Thinkin im Funny but perhaps im not..
Or Perhaps ur the one who lacks the Pot..

Lookin for a new girl to pound and choke... i drowned my hope
With crown and coke... i feel better once its down my throat..
One coat and my throats in love. Drugs? wanna get high just smoke my blood!

I sometimes shoot off at the mouth like a glock clap....
I talk back...and leave people screaming louder
THAN ME IN LOCKED CAPS
i JOTT CRAP.. No need to think...
i place pen to paper and watch it bleed its ink
I think i need a shrink... or some weed and drinks...
selling everything i own for Crack... Who needs a Sink?

Your raps should be start with WACK in the caption
No one has as fast a reaction ... i attack with a passion
smashin ur ass with a some crap i scratched on a napkin..
Ill kill ur wife's parents and have sex with an orphan..
Fights with me are quick to turn into a battles of epic proportion..
like the time i killed my parents in some form of dyslectic abortion.

Fuck a sword....My pen will penetrate you...
with so many holes it will ventilate u..
And one Demonstrations of my pens penetration will leave bleedin
like a monthly menstruation

Im so devistatin.. No medication.. my head is bakin...
with enough food for thought i could have fed the nation
I make one call and ur head is taken..
Shit i got more connections than Kevin bacon.

I just conform flows to scorn Foes ... Turned Evil and had Horns Grow.
I feel out of place like if someone talked Erkel into porno
And If aliens aent real howd i get crop circles in my corn Rows?

Lifes a trip with how these flows just swim right to me...
Wonderin Why final destinations the In flight movie
im so quick to loose my train of Thought...
Wonder why its the Sunshine state.. when it rains Alot.
mabey i should refrain from Pot

I just injected the liquid psychotics..
so if u need Need text to get sick wit ? I Got it…

a lil Something to Dice and eat you People Slowly...
Hi its nice to Meet you Im EvilJoey

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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

I spit a vicious verse.. about a bitches worth....
Tell her she cant sleep... she has to go do the dishes first!

Lmao woah shit you're a lyrical womanizer

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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

whole thing is pretty crazy.. like literally in a psychiatric way..



Love is just a sickness Curse.... I voted for abortion
Even after ive witnessed birth..

^^my favorite part


the part where u talk in 3rd person and mentioned it reminded me of myself cuz i've done that several times,

this was kinda choppy like u mentioned but it all fit decently in a way, it was pretty long but short to read i guess cuz the bars itself rn't long

nice piece here, keep droppin
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Post by Elizabeth »

i liked it style was similar to slim shady

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Post by - Mutual - »

^lol i thought that as well

good dope lines
dope multies really
a crazy styled flow
sum lines great others
different
my fav part tho

I think i need a shrink... or some weed and drinks...
selling everything i own for Crack... Who needs a Sink?

ha ha ^ everything but the kitchen sink
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Thx for feed

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Yea thx for commments people...

Been a while since i have wrote anything... but im feelin it so ill keep posting

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LoL

Post by Alter Ego »

Mutual was right the Sink Line kills

Good punhes..
Complex word play

Over all Good SHIT

Last line is Fire TOO!!!!

a lil Something to Dice and eat you People Slowly...
Hi its nice to Meet you Im EvilJoey


Thats 7 syllables Rhymed with 7 syllables in the Next Line!
thats nice.. and a Skillfull way to introduce ya self from what looks like was ya first real post on this site.
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