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The Definition Of ILL Awaits...

Post by ScottJames »

Yall Thought My First Drop Was Hot?!?
Shiiit..
Chew On This...


















Yo U Betta TRY-YA-BEST-TO-STRIKE-THIS-BOSS Or Ill FRY-YA-FLESH-COMBINED-WIT-SAUCE...
We Forced 2 Spit "Crystal Clear" Cuz We Either Gotta Be "HIGH-OR-DEF-TO-LIKE-YA-DROPS"!!!!
You GUYS-ARE-DEAD-OUTLINED-IN-CHALK!! My CREW-BE-YA-MAJESTY Ya NEWBS-NEED-SOME-PRACTICING...
We Imune 2 Everything Cuz The "Air We Breathe Is Deadly" Like The "MOVIE-THE-HAPPENING"!!!!
Cant MOVE-ME-WIT-MAGIC,-SEE Ill EAT-YA-WIT-BIGGER-KEYS BEAT-YA-WIT-WIZARDRY...
See, Your Shitty "Deliveries Are Uncalled For" Like "Accidental PIZZA-DELIVERIES"!!!!
SEIZE-YA-WIT-VIGOR-FREES!! Ever Had TWO-IN-YA-TOP-HERB? My Crew DO-IT-WIT-MOSSBURGS...
Believe I'll Have My Team "Fill U Squares Wit Led" Like Theys "DOIN-A-CROSSWORD"!!!!
Theyll SHOOT-UP-YA-SPOT-NERD!! U AINT-THREATEN-THIS-VET, Yall LAMES-STEPPIN-TO-DEATH...
Cuz Blows To Ya Guts'll Have Ya "Throwin Up Blood" Like The "GAME-REPPIN-HIS-SET"!!!!
JAMES-WRECKIN-YA-FLESH!! I Leave Ya "Frame Flat On The Ground" Like "DOWNED-TIRES"...
So Fly, Like HOW-HIGHER N When U Drop, Its Like "Robbin Williams" Cuz I "DOUBT-FIRE"!!!!
POUND-LIARS!! Im Wreckless! Hectic! Leave Ya Head NECK-LESS So Best RESPECT-THIS-LORDS-BARS...
U Own Me?! Ho Please!! "You Dont Know Who You Fuckin Wit" Like "DYSLEXIC-PORN-STARS"!!!!
My INFECTIOUS-SWORD-SCARS! Plus I Leave Ya "Heart-Break Kid" Like That Ben STILLER-GUY...
So With ILLER-WRITES My Verse Has "Great Taste n Less Filling" Like "MILLER-LITE"!!!!
Im Scary Like THRILLER-MIKE! STAGE-FRIGHT? Wel U Betta Listen Up Like U Bout To TAKE-FLIGHT..
Somethin AINT-RIGHT Cuz How U Gone Throw "Straight Lefts" When U Always Bout "GAY-RIGHTS"?!?!
HEY-CHI!! We Leavin These MC's The Same Way We RAPE-PUSSYS!! We Hot Like BAKED-GOODIES...
Erase These Whores Quicker Then Leave Ya "Face Wit More Zippers" Than A Fuckin "BAPE-HOODIE"!!!!

Yup Yup...
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WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
LOSSES:
Cee4 - 5-3
OVERALL:
31-1

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Yo U Betta TRY-YA-BEST-TO-STRIKE-THIS-BOSS Or Ill FRY-YA-FLESH-COMBINED-WIT-SAUCE...
We Forced 2 Spit "Crystal Clear" Cuz We Either Gotta Be "HIGH-OR-DEF-TO-LIKE-YA-DROPS"!!!!


lol ILL



SEIZE-YA-WIT-VIGOR-FREES!! Ever Had TWO-IN-YA-TOP-HERB? My Crew DO-IT-WIT-MOSSBURGS...
Believe I'll Have My Team "Fill U Squares Wit Led" Like Theys "DOIN-A-CROSSWORD"!!!!

LIL PLAYED BUT ILL, WORDED NICE



Im Scary Like THRILLER-MIKE! STAGE-FRIGHT? Wel U Betta Listen Up Like U Bout To TAKE-FLIGHT..
Somethin AINT-RIGHT Cuz How U Gone Throw "Straight Lefts" When U Always Bout "GAY-RIGHTS


lol ^



NICE DROP CAPTAIN! LOL
Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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Post by ScottJames »

just noticed i used "deliveries" twice...my bad...too lazy to change it, LoL
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WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
LOSSES:
Cee4 - 5-3
OVERALL:
31-1

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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

nice piece, like the punches and rhyme schemes, one of the better drops on illest
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Im Wreckless! Hectic! Leave Ya Head NECK-LESS So Best RESPECT-THIS-LORDS-BARS...
U Own Me?! Ho Please!! "You Dont Know Who You Fuckin Wit" Like "DYSLEXIC-PORN-STARS"!!!!

Cant MOVE-ME-WIT-MAGIC,-SEE Ill EAT-YA-WIT-BIGGER-KEYS BEAT-YA-WIT-WIZARDRY...
See, Your Shitty "Deliveries Are Uncalled For" Like "Accidental PIZZA-DELIVERIES"!!!!


These are the two hottest Bars Out Of the Whole Drop. I Think You Could Of Done Better This go Around. The Last Drop You Had Was Sick as Fuck, I Was Anticipating This Next Drop. Aside From The Forced multies This Was Pretty Good. Your Punches Are Prolly Your Strong Point. Anyway, Keep Droppin.
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Post by precise »

this was great, i liked it better than the last one, lots of quotables

Cuz Blows To Ya Guts'll Have Ya "Throwin Up Blood" Like The "GAME-REPPIN-HIS-SET"!!!!
^^^lol sick

Believe I'll Have My Team "Fill U Squares Wit Led" Like Theys "DOIN-A-CROSSWORD"!!!!
^^^ i like that one man, original!

"You Dont Know Who You Fuckin Wit" Like "DYSLEXIC-PORN-STARS"!!!!
^^^not bad dude

shit was nice, some forced multies but they were still respectable, ill look forward to the next one
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fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage

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Post by ScottJames »

oh yes...there will be more!!!!
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WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
LOSSES:
Cee4 - 5-3
OVERALL:
31-1

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Yo U Betta TRY-YA-BEST-TO-STRIKE-THIS-BOSS Or Ill FRY-YA-FLESH-COMBINED-WIT-SAUCE...
We Forced 2 Spit "Crystal Clear" Cuz We Either Gotta Be "HIGH-OR-DEF-TO-LIKE-YA-DROPS"!!!!

^^the multis were so bad that the punchline wasn't half as nice as it could have been

You GUYS-ARE-DEAD-OUTLINED-IN-CHALK!! My CREW-BE-YA-MAJESTY Ya NEWBS-NEED-SOME-PRACTICING...
We Imune 2 Everything Cuz The "Air We Breathe Is Deadly" Like The "MOVIE-THE-HAPPENING"!!!!

^I think a bit to much emphasis on what is not that creative of a line.

"Cant MOVE-ME-WIT-MAGIC,-SEE Ill EAT-YA-WIT-BIGGER-KEYS BEAT-YA-WIT-WIZARDRY...
See, Your Shitty "Deliveries Are Uncalled For" Like "Accidental PIZZA-DELIVERIES"!!!! "

^Nice. I'd give that a 9/10 for punchlines.

"SEIZE-YA-WIT-VIGOR-FREES!! Ever Had TWO-IN-YA-TOP-HERB? My Crew DO-IT-WIT-MOSSBURGS...
Believe I'll Have My Team "Fill U Squares Wit Led" Like Theys "DOIN-A-CROSSWORD"!!!"

^I haven't seen that concept used before, I liked the wordplay a lot.

"Theyll SHOOT-UP-YA-SPOT-NERD!! U AINT-THREATEN-THIS-VET, Yall LAMES-STEPPIN-TO-DEATH...
Cuz Blows To Ya Guts'll Have Ya "Throwin Up Blood" Like The "GAME-REPPIN-HIS-SET"!!!!'

^I'm surprised that nobody quoted this bar. Maybe because its a tad bit played.

JAMES-WRECKIN-YA-FLESH!! I Leave Ya "Frame Flat On The Ground" Like "DOWNED-TIRES"...
So Fly, Like HOW-HIGHER N When U Drop, Its Like "Robbin Williams" Cuz I "DOUBT-FIRE"!!!!

^I'm not feeling this one.

POUND-LIARS!! Im Wreckless! Hectic! Leave Ya Head NECK-LESS So Best RESPECT-THIS-LORDS-BARS...
U Own Me?! Ho Please!! "You Dont Know Who You Fuckin Wit" Like "DYSLEXIC-PORN-STARS"!!!!

I'm sure thats not the most original punchline in this drop. I'd give it a 7/10.

"My INFECTIOUS-SWORD-SCARS! Plus I Leave Ya "Heart-Break Kid" Like That Ben STILLER-GUY...
So With ILLER-WRITES My Verse Has "Great Taste n Less Filling" Like "MILLER-LITE"!!!! "

The last punch was cool. For one second in this drop, I didn't picture you coming through my monitor with your fist.

"Im Scary Like THRILLER-MIKE! STAGE-FRIGHT? Wel U Betta Listen Up Like U Bout To TAKE-FLIGHT..
Somethin AINT-RIGHT Cuz How U Gone Throw "Straight Lefts" When U Always Bout "GAY-RIGHTS"?!?!"

Obviously dope.

HEY-CHI!! We Leavin These MC's The Same Way We RAPE-PUSSYS!! We Hot Like BAKED-GOODIES...
Erase These Whores Quicker Then Leave Ya "Face Wit More Zippers" Than A Fuckin "BAPE-HOODIE"!!!!

Stupid, come on now.

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Overall, this was a typical 9.2/10 text battle verse, which shouldn't be overlooked, but the grammatically horrible transitions mixed with a few played lines will hold this one back from classic.

When you drop a verse like this you're basically screaming, look how dope I am, so I didn't want to give you a free pass!

I wouldn't agree with Ekoms either. One of the best punchline drops? Maybe top 10.

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Considering the fact that you did drop what is basically a battle verse I will rate it as such.

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Substance: 0
Creativity: 8.8
Multis: 8.3
Punchlines: 9.5
Flow: 8.8

Overall: 8.7

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Post by ScottJames »

damn! again bro, really appreciate the thorough feedback!
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WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
LOSSES:
Cee4 - 5-3
OVERALL:
31-1

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Post by Elizabeth »

Damn, u got skills boy.

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Post by Kurse »

Ur text is hott like chili-peppas mayneee!

nah fo' real bruh, your multi-work, combined with your structure and use of punchlines is overly. You make it look easy as pie. lol

If you did audios, I don't think it'd be a question that you'd be beastly. You should pic up a mic dude, cuz readin this kinda shit seems like a damn shame when I could be hearing it! Nah meannnn?

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Post by Sintakz »

He might be a 17 year old geeky motherfucker waitin' on his voice breakin', who know's.

Nice text tho, some play'd shit, some original shit & some simple, but hard hittin' shit.

Overall this was quite the shit, around a 8.25ish shit.

I said shit alot, shit.
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Post by ScottJames »

LMAO^^^

nah im 24, but unfortunatley, im still waitin for my voice to break in..

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WINS:
Ekmos - KO ... Duc3 - KO ... Jesodist - KO ... MagicMark - KO ... Animul_Instinkz - KO ... Old Rotten - KO ... Dr Kevorkian - KO ... Ambition - KO ... Eclipse - KO ... Domino - 5-3 ... Crimson - KO ... MC Scars - KO ... Modern Defiance - KO ... Tempest - KO ... QwarterZ - KO ... TreTru - KO ... Quix - KO ... Grim/Leeroi Green - KO ... Knowmad - KO ... Cre@tiv3 - KO ... MVario - TKO ... Hazard - KO ... ER - KO ... Colossus - KO ... FlipSide - KO ... JackDaRippa - KO ... JSteel - KO ... Kau The Lion - KO ... 32Neilz - KO ... Evolution - TKO ... Shazo - KO ... CBK - KO
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Cee4 - 5-3
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31-1

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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

lol i didn't say best, i said one of the better drops... as in out of every drop that exists on illest i'd put this one in the top 20 atleast
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Lol, drink whiskey while sufferin' from a throat infection
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